How years have passed – how time it flew
How each one brought me closer to you.
Often I envied how birds they swooped;
They feared not rain, nor wind, nor dew.
Thought I knew these faults bequeathed;
But eyes can’t quite choose what they see.
Oh! Diligence alone does clout the key.
Seems we’re staunch as though we’re same;
In perfect coherence there rose our flame.
Identity is such that when it’s lost;
Like victims fallen to untimely frost.
You’ve roused the heart – now wild and free
Have turned what once I had hoped to be.
We count not praise nor count we blame;
In perfect coherence there rose our flame.
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Form: Rondeau
Posted for Midweek Motif @ Poets United
How right you are Sanaa. “No man is an island” for we are made and developed by our interaction with others; particularly those we love.
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Eyes can’t choose what they see… Like that!!!
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I understand the message of your poem to be that identity is found through connection with another person. In the end there is ‘our flame.’ So I wonder if individual identity is then lost? And it becomes dual identity?
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As i read i was lulled as if entranced by the flicker of a candle flame – each word perfectly placed and flowing..and yes..we often are in relation to how others see us..
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“Identity is such that when it’s lost;
Like victims fallen to untimely frost.” I love these lines and the rhyming couplet at the end. A beautiful poem 🙂
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Brilliantly worded and weaved together like a web.
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“In perfect coherence there rose our flame.”…romantic way to discover oneself…sweet…
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Nothing, I imagine, can be much worse than a lost identity.
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Couldn’t have said it better myself. I believe we become who we are in the context of others. Loved this.
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I love “You’ve roused the heart, now wild and free”, and so agree with your note – we discover who we truly are in the presence of those we love………you are very wise.
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“Identity is such that when it’s lost;
Like victims fallen to untimely frost.”
Beautifully done, Sanna! The sense of identity is created through bonding and adding it to our own self. In this way, the connections are vital… though extremely delicate. I feel, it is better to define our selves internally, with limited reference to others. my two-penn’orth… smiles
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This is beautifully crafted-and so true!
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My sentiments exactly, it is through our relations with one another that our purpose, reveals itself and our identity is chartered. Have a nice Wednesday; and thanks for dropping in to read mine 🙂
Much love…
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“Diligence alone does clout the key.” Diligent staying and not exiting? Hmmm. I remember that becoming my identity when I was married. It would be wonderful in a meeting of equals.
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Sanaa, your poetry just seems to improve with every poem you write. Don’t think it can get much better than this though. It’s so lovely, wise, well written. I love the tenderness of your words. What a wordsmith you are.
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Beautifully written. When we lose ourselves in another, we take the chance of finding ourselves.
Elizabeth
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You always create such music and romance. 🙂
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I like how you portrayed a kind of cohesion…because that’s how it is. We are individuals, making a whole with each other. And who has ever said that identity can only be singular? Well-penned. 🙂
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Great Poetry..Appreciate the flow and the wisdom it carries.
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So many wonderful words in this one!
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You’ve roused the heart – now wild and free
Have turned what once I had hoped to be.
If only it can be triggered off every time. Great lines Sanaa!
Hank
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This is a beautiful response to identity in terms of how you see yourself in context to another or others. A rite of passage for the young and the way it should be.
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Many twists and turns in this journey of life – indeed we can’t always see where we are going next. It is nice to have that flame to see by.
It’s a lovely rondeau Sanaa like a braiding of ideas, life, discovery.
Hugs to you
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