
Paint
Picture
Deem it true
All consuming
Swirl of prussian blue
Let us dip in, immerse
Breathe in tales ofΒ rapture sweet
Many a perished soul lies sombre
Before conceding death, its final kiss
Yours, will be memory when orb does fade
Form: Etheree
Photo credits:Β NikH
Kerry invites us to write, inspired by the incredible poems of Kwesi Brew
What a brilliant etheree! (Transcending form.)
Also, I have been thinking for a long time what fabulous, perfectly chosen images you find to illustrate your poems.
Thank you so much, Rosemary π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Beautiful.
Thank you kindly, Helen π so glad you liked it.
Lies sombre before
Conceding death
In many instances demise of a person is preceded by lying prose for some reasons eg fraility, sickness etc. Pity!
Hank
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This is very beautifully done, Sanaa. I like the touches of rhyme within the etheree form.
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Thanks for introducing this form to me Sanaa!
My pleasure, Rajani β€οΈ good to see you π
“Swirl of prussian blue
Let us dip in, immerse
Breathe in tales of rapture sweet”…so passionate & visual…
Thank you so much, Sumana β€οΈ so glad you liked it π
This works perfectly with its contrast… there is passion in your words
Thank you so much, Bjorn π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Swirling and lost in Prussian blue – sounds quite breathtaking π
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How memory makes life so sweet as age wearies us letting us relive our halcyon days. Perhaps one day I’ll try this interesting form myself Sanaa.
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oh yes that Prussian blue is just the right colour for the passion and after Rosemary pointed out that it is an etheree (had to look it up!), your 10 liner is even more impressive
Thank you so much, Laura β€οΈ so glad you liked it π
true/blue
Very fine indeed!
Thank you so much, Susan β€οΈ good to see you π
This gives me chills, Sanaa. You worked the language well.
Thank you so much, Mary β€οΈ so glad you liked it π xo
This is my favorite part:
“All consuming
Swirl of prussian blue”
Thank you kindly π
I especially like that swirl of Prussian blue.
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I so enjoy the emotion in your writing, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Julian π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Luv the last line, a definite sense of The End
Happy Sunday
much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena β€οΈ good to see you π
Much love…
I can feel the contrast and the ending leaves a strong image of doom. Great job on form and weaving of words.
Thank you so much, Truedessa π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
A sad but promising piece.
ZQ
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Wonderful image. Beautiful words and form, they fit so well together.
Elizabeth
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Very nice love the Prussian Blue. And the last line. Thank you…bkm
Thank you so much, Mackenzie π good to see you β€οΈ
An outstanding, masterful job with the etheree form … wonderful words!
Thank you so much, Wendy β€οΈ so glad you liked it π
Beautifully, passionately, tragic
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A good choice of form, Sanaa, which you have executed with panache! I love the use of colour and painterly words: ‘swirl of prussian blue’ and the imperative form, which captures the reader and guides them to the end of the poem.
Thank you so much, Kim β€οΈ good to see you π
Excellent composition! Very interesting format – Etheree. Will try it. The painting is beautiful and goes with the poem very well. π
Thank you so much, Tarang π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
So lovely and emotive!
Thank you so much, Susie β€οΈ so glad you liked it π
Your words are visually stunning!
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In these tumultuous days, I think a breath of rapture would be invigorating!
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I’m liking the kiss of death bit, Sanaa. I also like your ‘shape poem’ here.
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