Passion

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Paint
Picture
Deem it true
All consuming
Swirl of prussian blue
Let us dip in, immerse
Breathe in tales ofΒ rapture sweet
Many a perished soul lies sombre
Before conceding death, its final kiss
Yours, will be memory when orb does fade

 

Form: Etheree

Photo credits:Β NikH

Kerry invites us to write, inspired by the incredible poems of Kwesi Brew

Posted on Sunday Mini Challenge @ Real Toads

and Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets UnitedΒ 

Comments

  1. What a brilliant etheree! (Transcending form.)

    Also, I have been thinking for a long time what fabulous, perfectly chosen images you find to illustrate your poems.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  2. Helen Patrice says:

    Beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Helen πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it.

  3. kaykuala h says:

    Lies sombre before
    Conceding death

    In many instances demise of a person is preceded by lying prose for some reasons eg fraility, sickness etc. Pity!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Most definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Hank πŸ™‚

  4. Kerry O'Connor says:

    This is very beautifully done, Sanaa. I like the touches of rhyme within the etheree form.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  5. Thotpurge says:

    Thanks for introducing this form to me Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      My pleasure, Rajani ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

  6. sumana says:

    “Swirl of prussian blue
    Let us dip in, immerse
    Breathe in tales of rapture sweet”…so passionate & visual…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ™‚

  7. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    This works perfectly with its contrast… there is passion in your words

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  8. Jae Rose says:

    Swirling and lost in Prussian blue – sounds quite breathtaking πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Jae ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

  9. Old Egg says:

    How memory makes life so sweet as age wearies us letting us relive our halcyon days. Perhaps one day I’ll try this interesting form myself Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Robin πŸ™‚

  10. oh yes that Prussian blue is just the right colour for the passion and after Rosemary pointed out that it is an etheree (had to look it up!), your 10 liner is even more impressive

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Laura ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ™‚

  11. Susan says:

    true/blue
    Very fine indeed!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susan ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

  12. Mary says:

    This gives me chills, Sanaa. You worked the language well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€ xo

  13. girl says:

    This is my favorite part:
    “All consuming
    Swirl of prussian blue”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly πŸ™‚

  14. Sherry Marr says:

    I especially like that swirl of Prussian blue.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ™‚

  15. Julian says:

    I so enjoy the emotion in your writing, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Julian πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. gillena says:

    Luv the last line, a definite sense of The End

    Happy Sunday

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

      Much love…

  17. Truedessa says:

    I can feel the contrast and the ending leaves a strong image of doom. Great job on form and weaving of words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  18. ZQ says:

    A sad but promising piece.
    ZQ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, ZQ πŸ™‚

  19. Elizabeth says:

    Wonderful image. Beautiful words and form, they fit so well together.

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Elizabeth ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  20. bkmackenzie says:

    Very nice love the Prussian Blue. And the last line. Thank you…bkm

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mackenzie πŸ™‚ good to see you ❀️

  21. Wendy Bourke says:

    An outstanding, masterful job with the etheree form … wonderful words!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  22. debi says:

    Beautifully, passionately, tragic

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  23. A good choice of form, Sanaa, which you have executed with panache! I love the use of colour and painterly words: ‘swirl of prussian blue’ and the imperative form, which captures the reader and guides them to the end of the poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

  24. Tarang Sinha says:

    Excellent composition! Very interesting format – Etheree. Will try it. The painting is beautiful and goes with the poem very well. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tarang πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  25. So lovely and emotive!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ™‚

  26. Samyuktha says:

    Your words are visually stunning!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Samyuktha ❀️ so good to see you πŸ™‚

  27. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    In these tumultuous days, I think a breath of rapture would be invigorating!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, MMT πŸ™‚

  28. Jim says:

    I’m liking the kiss of death bit, Sanaa. I also like your ‘shape poem’ here.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim ❀️ good to see you πŸ˜€

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