October: In accord with Autumn in bronze and song in heart

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Poem inspired by Peter Sarstedt’s lyrical masterpiece, Where do you go to my lovely, 1969

Tonight, the soul is dark and the moon’s awash
with tears
as though aware of what’s stirring inside,
I am shades of sepia intermingled with blithesome and serious.
Fleeting is lust and yet
we continue to chase the desires of flesh,
where do you go to when ocean foam refuses to touch your feet?
When grass seems indifferent?
Where do you go to when droplets are unable to echo your ache?
I see you with your smiles
oblivious to the shredding of coconut husk covering of my heart,
to the quivering of my lips
as I look you in the eye and put on a straight face.
It’s deeper than you think, this abyss of emotion that accompanies
after heartache,
where will you go to when words come out of hiding?
where will you go to when October comes searching for answers?
I am sorry what was it that you said, love?
You’re no longer present in memory but my thoughts distract you.

 

 

Photo credits: Mira Nedyalkova, dark underwater

Posted for Sanaa’s Challenge @ Real Toads

Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Jae Rose says:

    I love the mystery wrapped up in this story..perfect ending to make us think

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  2. Shawna says:

    β€œI see you with your smiles
    oblivious to the shredding of coconut ”

    I love this so much. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Shawna πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  3. Kerry says:

    A beautiful song of questions without answers… Where do we go to, alone n our heads?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😍 so glad the poem resonated with you ❀️

  4. Old Egg says:

    Nothing hurts so much as lost love and you express this so well in this poem Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  5. Thotpurge says:

    where will you go to when words come out of hiding?
    – nicely done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  6. β€˜Autumn in bronze’ is the perfect phrase for October, Sanaa, and I like your choice of song! It reminds me of my mother, it was one of her favourites. I love the lines:
    β€˜I am shades of sepia intermingled with blithesome and serious’
    and
    β€˜oblivious to the shredding of coconut husk covering of my heart’.
    One small thing, the correct English is ‘to be awash with…’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  7. sherry marr says:

    The moon awashed with tears, the shades of sepia, a wonderfully Otcoberish poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  8. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    The end particularly touched me… and I feel that in the end all questions remain unanswered.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ❀️

  9. Timoteo says:

    There is a sensual quality to much of your poetry that is unabashedly on display in this one, and always highly anticipated by those, such as myself, who dwell under a smoldering sign of fire. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Timoteo πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  10. Helen L Dehner says:

    Each of your ‘where questions’ strikes a chord, as always love the image you chose.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  11. rob kistner says:

    We chose the same song Sanaa. I love your treatment of it, and I love the photo! I just had my vouple walk away from the silence.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  12. Pratibha says:

    Quite a wistful verse .. Lovely take on the amazing song you chose.. It so matches the tone and setting πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pratibha πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ❀️

  13. Jim says:

    Where does one go? Go into desolation and suffering. Sometimes life get really bad.
    Thanks for the nice orompt.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  14. Margaret says:

    love the idea of October searching for answers…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  15. I loved the way you wrote the last line…it ends leaving one to thoughts!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sreeja πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. Vivian Zems says:

    You dug down deep with this one! I love the depth of emotion and the echo of heartache. ❀️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  17. Toni Spencer says:

    A lovely poem. I love the “Autumn in bronze”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  18. I’ve loved that song for decades! You give it new dimensions, in your own inimitable way, creating something for which it is merely a starting-point.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! ❀️ Thank you so much, Rosemary 😍 so glad the poem resonated with you! ❀️

  19. Mary says:

    Yes – where will someone go when words come out of hiding! That is a big big question. The last line is interesting, and I am trying tithing about what it might mean, id the two of you are still in touch or not. Definitely an evocative poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  20. I love the shredding coconut husk covering the heart, and the memory of the loved one, strong, though the words deny that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  21. Sara McNulty says:

    β€œwhere do you go to when ocean foam refuses to touch your feet?”

    That, to me, is a heartbreaker. Gorgeous poem, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  22. “where do you go to when ocean foam refuses to touch your feet?
    When grass seems indifferent?”

    These lines broke my heart into tiny little pieces (in the best of ways). Where do you go, indeed, when the world stops working as it should?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ❀️

  23. Chrissa says:

    Love the way you seem to characterize the speaker almost as a street gone dark, only memories talking to each other in darkened alcoves. This catches at the October sadness, the darkness coming closer.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chrissa πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  24. Love and longing is so sweetly painful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Colleen ❀️

  25. Barry says:

    Powerful poem with a strong beginning that instantly took my breath away.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  26. I am shades of sepia (love that)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  27. dsnake1 says:

    this sensual poem is such a delight to read. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lee San πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  28. Utterly gorgeous Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

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