As changing leaves in November,
as secrets I carry with me
into sleep,
fascinated by shimmering kisses
that hurt,
I pen down thoughts of the moment.
There are days when Iām the wind
urging earth to wrap its arms around me
and closer keep.
Photo credits: Loui Jover, Pinterest
Posted for “Quadrille #91” @ dverse Pub
Posted on Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
64 Responses
The last 3 lines is wonderful in its imagery!ā¤ļø
Thank you so much, Vivian š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
You had me at /fascinated by shimmering kisses that hurt/. A nice peek at your heart song, though the last few notes seem sad.
Thank you so much, Glenn š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
Love that you are both the wind, and the one who craves it. Wonderful.
Thank you so much, De š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
“shimmering kisses that hurt” is intriguing to me. I can understand the need for grounding at times.
Thank you so much, Jade š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
where the season and the soul entwine … love it!
Thank you so much, Kate š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
Careful the secrets carried into sleep. Hope they’re happy ones!
Thank you so much, Beverly š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
Lovely quadrille. I really like the first three lines.
Thank you so much, Maria š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
Best time of the year to reflect and write!
Definitely š thanks for stopping by, Grace ā¤ļø
this poem has good bones
Thank you so much, Erbiage š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
Your title is very evocative, Sanaa, and I love the idea of November secrets. These lines resonated:
āThere are days when Iām the wind
urging earth to wrap its arms around me
and closer keep.ā
Thank you so much, Kim š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
Nice lines about the wind wanting the earth to give it a hug.
Thank you so much, Frank š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
The thought of being the wind is perfect…
Thank you so much, Bjorn š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
There are days when I’m the wind. – I like this line. It feels like a poem all on its own.
Thank you so much, Ali š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
Lovely ā¤ļø
Thank you so much, Sabio š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
Yes, lovely phrase: ‘shimmering kisses’. And that they hurt gives a whole new depth immediately.
Our November winds here are wild, strong bursts causing havoc; not sure you would wish to be them, lol. Better to be your gentler one, seeking a hug from the earth.
Thank you so much, Rosemary š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
Every now and again, my dearest Sanaa, you share a line that says so many things; “fascinated by shimmering kisses / that hurt” is one of those. Those words make me think about how some relationships can be murder on our hearts, while feeling so good to the skin.
Thank you so much, Magaly š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
“There are days when Iām the wind” Love the feeling of this.
Thank you so much, J. Cosmo š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
I love how crisp this is – like an autumn leaf
Thank you so much, Jae š so good to see you ā¤ļø
Soothing like summer warm wind and enchanting like winter chill!!!!
Thank you so much, Vandana š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
I love how inventive you are with your poetry Sanaa. I am sure many of us would wish to write such verse as this.
Thank you so much, Robin š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
This is gorgeous!!! That mix of comfort/discomfort is the stuff of long winter dreams.
Thank you so much, Chrissa š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
I like the idea of the earth wrapping one’s arms around one. How comforting that might be! I also think it would be wonderful if we also wrapped our arms around the earth as well. It would be a beautiful picture to consider both!! A beautiful quadrille, and a comforting one!
Awww gosh! ā¤ļø Thank you so much, Mary š so glad you enjoyed it! ā¤ļø
Nice image of the wind.
Thank you so much, Rajani š so good to see you ā¤ļø
This gets better each time I read it, Sanaa
Thank you so much, Stranded Tree š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
This is so lovely, especially your closing lines. Beautiful!
Thank you so much, Sherry š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
In the center of all the beautiful imagery “That hurt”, sits at the heart of the poem, both in construction and feeling.
Thank you so much, Rommy š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
“the wind urging earth to wrap its arms around me”…what a beautiful and challenging concept. I love it!
Thank you so much, H. Hennenburg š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
“There are days when Iām the wind / urging earth to wrap its arms around me” As if there is something elusive about you that longs to be grounded. I really love the imagery in this.
Thank you so much, Lori š so glad you enjoyed it ā¤ļø
Love, love your last 3 lines–for me, they are the heart of this beautiful piece!
Thank you so much, Audrey š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø
Very nice, Sanaa. In general the poem to me had a sad note, lingering to be made open. The last two lines did for me, I was imagining a “Death Wish” here. We all probably have had those at times.
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Thank you so much, Jim š so glad the poem resonated with you ā¤ļø
This little piece blew me away.
‘There are days when Iām the wind
urging earth to wrap its arms around me
and closer keep’
stunning ā¦ fantastic writing!
Awwww gosh! ā¤ļø Thank you so much, Wendy š so glad you enjoyed it! ā¤ļø
Love the image of the wind.
Thank you so much, Rall š so glad you liked it ā¤ļø