Near the end of a long and winding road

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Though dismal dawning sky rebukes longing yet here I am, 
in quiet fury hung discouragement loathing the way I am. 

I believe darkness can dissipate with the flowering of light,
it’s impossible to go on between crossroads yet here I am.

We loved similar to the way one learns to become unafraid,
I wonder whether heartache understands the way I am. 

Mournful winter how much longer until end of bloodbath?
surely world must know answer judging by how silent I am.

I stand hoping tears may convert into fulfillment of desires,
when sky comes falling you will know just how devout I am.

 

Photo credits: Giphy

Form: Ghazal 

Process notes: Magaly invites us to craft poetry that wastes no words. I chose
to write combining two concepts together:

“I tell you this to break your heart, by which I mean only that it break open and never close again to the rest of the world.” ― Mary Oliver.

A stunning ghazal “Kab raat basar hogi,” by Faiz Ahmed Faiz where he longs for
love, peace and revolution. 

Posted for Weekend Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

 

and Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United 

Comments

  1. I’ve never read Faiz Ahmed Faiz, but I shall give the work a try one of these days…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

      1. I thought the “English” in the link that leads us to “Kab raat basar hogi”, but no luck. No matter. I am back to say that I really like that middle stanza, all those raw emotions… which leave a reader wanting to hug the speaker really, really, really tight.

        1. Sanaa says:

          Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad it resonated with you! ❤️

  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I can full agree on the wish for a more peaceful world.. lovely ghazal

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  3. Rommy says:

    Longing is painful when there is no guarantee of a reward for patience.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rommy ❤️

  4. Brendan says:

    Cold rain and yearning pair so magically. And what a perfecting final two lines. You continue to flower.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Brendan 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! ❤️

  5. Helen says:

    “I am” is a beautiful strong affirmation. Beautifully composed.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  6. “We loved similar to the way one learns to become unafraid”….what a cool line – and perceptive awareness – that is. And through it all, “here I am.” Learning and growing, and writing your journey. Cool.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. robtkistner says:

    This was quite beautiful Sanaa, plaintive and deep.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  8. Toni Spencer says:

    Yes. Let the wishes for a more peaceful world ring itself around us.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Toni ❤️

  9. You did a great job of combining two concepts together into a ghazal, Sanaa, and I like the Mary Oliver quotation. Your title reminded me of the Beatles song, ‘The long and winding road’: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fR4HjTH_fTM
    I particularly like the lines:
    ‘I believe darkness can dissipate with the flowering of light,
    it’s impossible to go on between crossroads yet here I am’
    and
    ‘I stand hoping tears may convert into fulfilment of desires,
    when sky comes falling you will know just how devout I am.’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. words when gathered so lightly and gently are so soothing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marcoantonio 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  11. Sumana Roy says:

    A most beautiful ghazal. “the flowering of light”…Love this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  12. Mary says:

    I love the idea of darkness dissipating with the flowering of light. and the idea of tears converting into the fulfillment of desires. I also enjoyed the picture you chose as well!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  13. A truly lovely Ghazal Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  14. Othermary says:

    I particularly love your closing couplet, Sanaa

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  15. Tears can do many things. They can cleanse. They can heal. And sometimes they can even turn into our heart’s desire. Tears. They aren’t as worthless as some people suppose.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, MMT ❤️

  16. Chrissa says:

    A poem that rewards both several readings, for rhythm and the way you balance the ideas (dark/light and the crossroads, sadness and fury and therefore stillness and motion) and for the way the text brings you back to the image of a burning candle balanced between one already out and one not yet lit. Lovely.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chrissa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  17. Kerry says:

    A beautiful ghazal – I especially adore the central stanza.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. Marian says:

    Judging by how silent I am… so powerful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  19. Vivian Zems says:

    This is so beautiful in its affirmations and sense of being in the moment. Lovely!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  20. Truedessa says:

    The refrain of “I am” gives the words and poem strength.

    I wonder whether heartache understands the way I am.

    I too wonder…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. This is amazing! That last stanza is going to stay with me.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jenna 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  22. ZQ says:

    You covered a lot of ground in a short distant. Well done.
    ZQ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, ZQ 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  23. gillena says:

    The yet brings so much reality into your poem. Yes we can have the faith and the hope and the trust. Yet the desolation and the longing sneaks up on us.
    Hugs
    Thanks for droppibg by my sumie Sunday today

    Much💖💖💖love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Gillena 😍 so glad you liked it! ❤️

      Hugs

      Much🌻🌼🌹love

  24. rob kistner says:

    I enjoyed reading this again Sanaa. The third couplet really struck me on this 2nd read. Falling in love is losing the fear, especially to give oneself wholly in love. Beautiful! I posted about the Ancients.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  25. Tears and rain. You and winter seem one in the same.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  26. Wendy Bourke says:

    Beautiful writing, as always, Sanaa. And that lovely, poignant closing line: utterly linger-worthy … a wonderful – really superb – line of poetry.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  27. J Cosmo Newbery says:

    A wistful, reflective piece. Nicely done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, J.Cosmo 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  28. Thank you for introducing me to ghazal and so beautifully. I am so weak on forms.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. M says:

    wishing for peace is perhaps the best prayer

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, M ❤️

  30. Vivian Zems says:

    I love this, Sanaa. There’s nothing like a Ghazal to repeat affirmations. I’m sure I commented on this earlier- but I’m not sure. I love that it’s simple- yet so revealing- I.e. .”…..I am”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

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