Lines composed so that he would dishevel his hair

In cloud forest sighs take refuge; 
become loud in soft light 
as wintry wind blows hair into artistic swirls– 
how then, 
am I supposed to laud the mountains? 
Be in visual empathy with red poppies below? 
I am torn between the two. 

Lines composed so that he would dishevel  
his hair; as rays sweet 
come upon moss softened rocks, 
oh, let them be– 
in cobalt blue of the sky, shimmer unconfined; 
I find, I am unable to breathe otherwise. 

Would that Neruda lend me some words; 
scent of magnolias, peach 
and a chorus bold, 
for dusk pales in comparison to contours– 
clairvoyant eyes, 
who can define hypnotic lustre, 
in a world where romance is a thing of the past, 
the grey-brown of his pupils, 
confirm what otherwise remains hidden, 
remains obscure. 
I confess, they bewitch me with their wild civility, 
now, especially when the sea is wanton.  

And yet, somehow, he deems himself as ordinary, 
what devilry is this 
that buds between complicated hours of life 
and death, blossom in return– 
would that Frost lend me insight, 
a luscious escape 
into the wilderness so as to collect my thoughts, 
I shall, then, describe the numerous ways  
in which he dismisses the pulsating of heart; 
I claim full responsibility. 
Hair disheveled after lines are composed.  

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

  1. lillian says:

    “Would that Neruda lend me some words;
    scent of magnolias, peach
    and a chorus bold,
    for dusk pales in comparison to contours–
    clairvoyant eyes, ”
    sigh….you are indeed the queen of romanticism!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Haha can’t help it! Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  2. Dear Sanaa you did not need Neruda for inspiration! This was beautifully penned. I wanted to dishevel his hair ☺️❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Christine 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  3. Ingrid says:

    Just beautiful, Sanaa! I also found your reading very moving ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 It was so wonderful to have you with us after all this time!! 💄❤️

  4. Gorgeous, how you spun this and bewitched us all! I was in “visual empathy” with more than just the red poppies, I could feel the “cobalt blue of the sky, shimmer unconfined;” and I too, was left breathless! Great piece!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Tricia 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  5. kittysverses says:

    This is a stunning piece, Sanaa. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  6. It was wonderful to hear you read yesterday, Sanaa. This poem would work perfectly as a companion piece to the poem you read. I especially love how the title was transformed at the end to “Hair disheveled after lines are composed.” ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      A companion piece .. yes! Wow I hadn’t thought of it that way 😀 You are right! Thank you so much, Merril 🙂 so glad you liked it! I will be performing this one on Saturday 💄❤️

  7. Ken Gierke says:

    I could hear the “sigh” of the first line echoing throughout the poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ken 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  8. anotherKate says:

    This is wonderful! So full of imagery, and I love the ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate 😀 it was wonderful to meet you at Open Link LIVE! 💄❤️

  9. These lines are truly romantic, Sanaa, and I love the way you thread the dishevelled hair through them. You had me hooked with the opening line. I really enjoyed the lines:
    ‘how then,
    am I supposed to laud the mountains?
    Be in visual empathy with red poppies below?
    I am torn between the two’,
    the phrase ‘dusk pales in comparison to contours’, and the wanton sea.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Kim 😍 so glad you enjoyed it! 💄❤️

  10. Sunra Rainz says:

    Beautiful poem, Sanaa! A sensory cornucopia! I especially love the 3rd and 4th stanzas, too many wonderful lines to quote 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Sunra 😀 so glad the poem and its imagery appealed to you 💄❤️

  11. kaykuala says:

    Wonderful writings Sanaa! As always one gets treated to great poetry all the time!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:

    Loved to hear you read this (and the other poem) so romantic as usual

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

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