Insomnia

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Like wisps of clouds are hours of sleep
ephemeral, and yet saccharine sweet.
As darknessΒ piled on I began to sway,
with mind in motion as battle of waves.

And though the heart lapped with ease
I pondered on every rhythm and beat,
observed as moments grew austere
while gust outside roared loud and clear.

I reach out and chase hoping to achieve
if not enough then few hours of sleep,
As dawn swiveled on I began to sway
with mind in motion as battle of waves.

 

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Posted for ‘Sanaa’s Challenge’ @ Real Toads

& Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Pub

Comments

  1. Vijita says:

    The repetitive actions at “darkness piled” and “dawn swiveled” according to me made the writing more intense. A beautifully written piece, Sanaa πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vijita πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  2. Bev says:

    All too often, sleep is ephemeral as wisps of clouds. It is in this time poems sometime come to me as midnight epiphanies, so all is not lost!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Beverly πŸ™‚

  3. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Oh sleep… sometimes it’s overrated, but so sweet when you are lulled away.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  4. lynn says:

    You make insomnia beautiful with rhythm and rhyme!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww!❀️ Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it!❀️

  5. Charlotte says:

    You’ve done repetition here so well! The whole poem flows beautifully.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Charlotte πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  6. I’m taken away by the flow of this dream

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Martin πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  7. I do think you’ve hit on a universal theme here–insomnia is not our friend. I just have to get up and watch TV or read a book until I get drowsy. Getting no sleep, or just a few hours, I recall, made the day at work nightmarish. I liked the subtleness of your rhyme scheme.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  8. gillena says:

    Swayed in just before the dawn. I know, happen to me a lot.

  9. Grace says:

    I specially admire this part:

    As darkness piled on I began to sway,
    with mind in motion as battle of waves.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  10. Lynn says:

    In your deft hands, insomnia is wrapped up beautifully in a comforting lullaby.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  11. Nosaint Augustine says:

    Very apt words, Sanaa, and I can empathize. I have mostly beat my insomnia so never despair, it is possible!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww!❀️ Thank you so much, Augustine πŸ™‚ so good to see you!❀️

      (the poem is not autobiographical)

  12. Though insomnia does feel like a “battle of waves”, your poem has a beautiful ebb and flow.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jennifer πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. De Jackson says:

    As usual, Sanaa, your flow is perfect.

  14. ZQ says:

    πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜€

  15. Wisps of cloud, ephemeral and saccharine sweet – yes, that’s sleep when you’re an insomniac. I love the way you capture the invasion of thought and sound:
    ‘I pondered on every rhythm and beat,
    observed as moments grew austere
    while gust outside roared loud and clear’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. HA says:

    “with mind in motion as battle of waves” : The refrain captures the essence of the poem so well. If only insomnia too could be this poetic. A lovely piece, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anmol πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  17. I like the repetition in this, so very like the flow of the waves, almost a cascade poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  18. Well told. I know this so well!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Petru 😊 so good to see you ❀

  19. The last two lines describe every sleepless night I’ve ever had.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😊 so good to see you ❀

  20. Jilly says:

    The form gives a wonderful flow to your words. Nicely done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jilly 😊 so glad you enjoyed it ❀

  21. Jenna says:

    I like the comparison of sleep with clouds.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jenna 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  22. Frank says:

    I liked the repeating line: “with mind in motion as battle of waves” although I’m not clear what it means, but that might not matter.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  23. Old Egg says:

    Beautifully written Sanaa and how easy to relate to that “swaying with mind in motion” as sleep eludes us.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  24. Lovely, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

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