In city of grey mists and unfulfilled desires
Sanaa -
June 5, 2018
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Night is emblem of death, discord and delirium,
yet I allowed myself
to tread
along darkening streets of cobblestone
as thoughts of you
caress burning skin– I whispered your name
longing for you
to unfurl me as petals of unadulterated rose
and deep conversation.

 

Photo credits: touchofcolor

Posted for ‘Quadrille #58′ @ dVerse Pub

and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

& On Monday Writes @ My Blog-Verses

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56 Responses

  1. De Jackson says:
    June 5, 2018 at 4:54 am

    Oooo. I love those petals, especially. So visual.

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  2. Linda Lee Lyberg says:
    June 5, 2018 at 5:17 am

    Such a beautiful write, Sanaa.

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  3. Dwight says:
    June 5, 2018 at 6:46 am

    A nice flow of images and feelings! Well done!
    Dwight

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  4. Jo says:
    June 5, 2018 at 7:38 am

    Lovely writing!

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  5. Vivian Zems says:
    June 5, 2018 at 7:39 am

    I can imagine stumbling in the dark as these revelations unfold. Very visual!

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  6. Frank says:
    June 5, 2018 at 8:39 am

    Those “darkening streets of cobblestone” do seem ominous.

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  7. Arcadia Maria says:
    June 5, 2018 at 8:46 am

    Such vivid imagery in this piece. Well done.

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  8. Grace says:
    June 5, 2018 at 9:00 am

    Such deep longing despite the emblem of the night ~

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  9. lynn says:
    June 5, 2018 at 10:08 am

    You brought beauty and desire from cobblestone streets.

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  10. Kim M. Russell says:
    June 5, 2018 at 3:16 pm

    That’s an effective, alliterative list of three, Sanaa: ‘death, discord and delirium’. A dark beginning to a romantic poem that ends with:.
    ‘…unfurl me as petals of unadulterated
    rose and deep conversation’.

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  11. Thotpurge says:
    June 5, 2018 at 5:22 pm

    unadulterated rose… like that!

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  12. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    June 5, 2018 at 5:57 pm

    This speaks the voice of darkness… the best place to seek solace in company of someone special

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  13. Annell Livingston says:
    June 5, 2018 at 9:37 pm

    Wow! You used your 44 words well.

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  14. Cara O' Donoghue says:
    June 5, 2018 at 9:45 pm

    This is gorgeous! I see what you did there with the opening “Night is emblem of death, discord and delirium”.. giving the poem multiple dimensions!

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  15. Timoteo says:
    June 5, 2018 at 10:51 pm

    There is a sensuality about this that is OOO-WEE!

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  16. Robert says:
    June 5, 2018 at 10:54 pm

    the poem was beautifully written and it takes you through a layer of visuals and thought

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  17. Kerry says:
    June 5, 2018 at 11:57 pm

    The last two lines are especially resonant.

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  18. Rall says:
    June 6, 2018 at 12:59 am

    Very seductive and lovely poem. All I can say is KL is inspiring some sensual poetry:) Have not been there for decades. Use to stay at Batu Ferringhi in Penang. At the time there were only two hotels there…yes that long ago. Beautiful place back then.

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  19. kanzensakura says:
    June 6, 2018 at 4:47 am

    Oh the passion in this! Lovely write.

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  20. barbara says:
    June 6, 2018 at 6:09 am

    Beautiful and sensuous with a hint of danger. Wonderful <3

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  21. Carrie Van Horn says:
    June 6, 2018 at 6:19 am

    From the title to the last word…it is breathtaking Sanaa! I love it!

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  22. kaykuala says:
    June 6, 2018 at 8:02 am

    I whispered your name longing for you
    to unfurl me as petals of unadulterated
    rose and deep conversation.

    Longings seems to be getting the upper-hand and feelings of love make it interesting.!

    Hank

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  23. Victoria Slotto says:
    June 6, 2018 at 8:37 am

    Raw sensuality softened a bit by those rose petals.

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  24. Jim says:
    June 6, 2018 at 1:03 pm

    A beautiful yet wistful 44, Sanaa. Walking the darkened street can be very scary. I remember walking back to our hotel at 39th Street and 9th Avenue quite late at nights. Dark, quiet, and desolate.
    ..

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  25. Susie Clevenger says:
    June 6, 2018 at 10:32 pm

    This is beautiful sensuality.

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  26. Lona Gynt says:
    June 8, 2018 at 3:01 am

    A lot of the comments talk about the visual richness, and it is true, you draw from a rich palette of dark and beautiful shades, but I was struck by the tactile sensuality, the rose brings an image not only of color but of a velvet feel, and the description of the skin whispering out to the night. So beautiful.

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  27. Magaly Guerrero says:
    June 11, 2018 at 12:56 am

    Love and lust are such delicious dangers. We see their teeth, but we still jump in for the kiss. Even if we know the bite will eventually get us.

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  28. gillena says:
    June 25, 2018 at 10:08 pm

    Deeply sensous. Lovely imagery. Sanaa thank you for dropping by and linking up at Monday WRites today

    Much💞love

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