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We carry the remains. We carry them within, fragrance of what once was, in the pages of life. Roses here aren’t red; they are obsidian like a barrage of false hopes, the shoreline perpetually erased, nothing planned and nothing expected.

Crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end. Only gentle, faint glimmer ofΒ light. A glimpse of an earlier existence lurks like a hawk on the fringe, and were it not for the seashells, we would have lost our way. And in the seas there flowed answers, our hearts warehouse splattered and smeared with shame, sorrow, with degradation; and why not, did we heed to the call of nature when maples were perspiring, when glaciers were rumbling and sobbing began in stem and seed.

Perhaps it’s not too late for us to act as catalyst for change.

 

 

 

 

Photo credits: pexels-maria-orlova, fair use

Merril hosts at dVerse and asks us to write inspired by
a line from “A Map to the Next World,” by Joy Harjo.
Come join us! πŸ’

Posted for Prosery: Finding Your Way @dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Oh Sanaa! This is so beautifully written, even in its despair. It is so full of beautiful, lyrical phrases–and just heartbreaking:
    “and why not, did we heed to the call of nature when maples were perspiring, when glaciers were rumbling and sobbing began in stem and seed.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Fantastic writing… love how you weaved the sentence into a future we might see if we don’t change our ways… love the flow of the prose.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Sanaa- This is truly beautiful but intensely sad. Let’s hope we heed the call.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Bev Crawford says:

    We will forever carry within the fragments and fragrance of what once was. Nicely written!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Lillian says:

    Just beautiful! “A glimpse of an earlier existence lurks like a hawk on the fringe, and were it not for the seashells, we would have lost our way. ” And these words – oh the image and feelings they evoke!
    I do think the earth is crying….the oceans rising with her tears; the glaciers shedding and crashing into the sea. A timely piece….and it uses the line so well!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Lillian πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. msjadeli says:

    I like the colors and the reflections of their forms in varied contexts and how they reflect our thoughts and moods.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Dora says:

    Sanaa,
    I love the hopeful note in this, as well as the line incorporated so beautifully in the imagery and rhythm of the prose. This stood out for me:
    “And in the seas there flowed answers . . . .” Lovely.
    Pax,
    Dora

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. “when maples were perspiring, when glaciers were rumbling and sobbing began in stem and seed.” So well written. We need to open our eyes and ears before it’s too late. Great use of the prompt! πŸ’–

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tricia πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Mish says:

    Beautiful. A serious subject so exquisitely expressed. I especially like this….”And in the seas there flowed answers, our hearts warehouse splattered and smeared with shame, sorrow, with degradation”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mish πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Your story is a great call for change in attitudes and actions. The obsidian rose is a vivid image!
    Well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  11. Lovely prose! very beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mrityunjay πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Ingrid says:

    This is a beautifully-written poetic prose Sanaa. You blended the line so well with your style, I didn’t actually realise I was reading the given line on the first reading. As for the content, I feel it is a dire warning despite the beauty of the words:
    ‘did we heed to the call of nature when maples were perspiring, when glaciers were rumbling and sobbing began in stem and seed.’
    – I hope it’s not too late for us!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. and were it not for the seashells, we would have lost our way.

    This is stunning prose, Sanaa. You consistently blow my mind.

    <3
    David

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, David πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Sunra Rainz says:

    This whole piece is stunning, Sanaa. I particularly love: A glimpse of an earlier existence lurks like a hawk on the fringe, and were it not for the seashells, we would have lost our way. Beautiful <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sunra πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Kerfe says:

    Even in despair there is hope. So poignant.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  16. Helen says:

    Seashells …. like bread crumbs leading our way perhaps? I enjoyed your Prosery piece!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. …..there is no beginning or end.
    Only gentle, faint glimmer of light.

    Love the way you provide the continuity Sanaa! It smoothly blends into the story!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Tzvi Fievel says:

    “in the seas there flowed answers.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tzvi πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. Paul Cannon says:

    I love this Sanaa, and especially the sense that time is short but yet there is a glimmer of light.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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