Outside golden light
gleaming soft upon my skin.
Such a strong sense of you
as I bend towards sleep,
exchange a smile that’s shyly
lewd, mournful and serene.
Night grew quiet as I recalled
brutality and sadism that
seem to appear in cyclical pattern.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Posted for ‘Quadrille #59′ @ dVerse Pub
And on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads
Nice description of that smile as “shyly
lewd, mournful and serene”.
Thank you so much, Frank 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Wonderful description of the moon but oh, that brutality and sadism. It seems you are well shut of him.
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The ambiguity in the ending makes me wonder if the cycles are yours or your beloved’s. I do like the interesting twist at the end.
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Both romantic and abusive…happens more often than we realize.
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It starts deceptively soft but these lines say otherwise:
brutality and sadism that
seem to appear in cyclical pattern.
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Twist at the end took me by surprise. There is more to this story.
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The picture is ethereal, the beginning romantic and then, it dips into …… a reflection on life and love.
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Very interesting poem…. You gave just enough to make one wonder…does she or doesn’t she//
Dwight
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Believed your poem to be going in one direction, but the brutality and sadism line slammed the melancholy door shut. Some complex emotion there..
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Oh Sanaa, reading this was painful. You’ve described the cycles of abuse so well in 44 words. xxx
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like coming up for a breath of air, before being submerged in torment again. gruesome and gripping.
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lewd, mournful and serene… that is quite a smile!
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I am left without words……
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For some time it felt like a beautiful dream, but in the end it washed away
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I too was taken by surprise at the end. Chilling!
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What an ending! The last few lines are terrifying all by themselves, but reading them after experiencing the tenderness of the beginning makes them even more explosive. Like abuse, which is more painful because most abusers don’t do it all the time.
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It is as Muscio says ‘Abuse is the means in which violence retards love.’
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I don’t bend towards sleep, but lean. What a surprise ending just when I was thinking romantically.
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There is a wonderful contrast in these lines:
exchange a smile that’s shyly
lewd, mournful and serene.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Abuse is not worth any romantic lovely experience. It eventually destroys you. Get out now.!
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That glance, “shyly lewd, mournful and serene” strikes me…..I understand why it is mournful after reading the closing lines.
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The closing left me absolutely breathless! Phew!
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Interesting and surprising. Leaving questions in the mind of the reader makes for mystery also. Happy you dropped by my blog today Sanaa
Much♥️love
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Much🌹love
Love the painting, and your description of her smile!
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You have packed a lot of emotion into this quadrille! If you ever get that gut feeling that something isn’t right about a person or situation, trust it.
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So sensual and inticing, but oh, that twist in the last lines! A marvelous write, Sanaa! 🙂
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A portrait of mixed feelings and memories artfully portrayed Sanaa.
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From soft to brutal- wrapped in eloquence!
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a very sensual poem with an interesting twist at the end
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Whoa, a foreboding turn of one’s passion.
😉
This is truly lovely Sanaa!!
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Such a strong sense of you
as I bend towards sleep, –
these are my favorite lines, especially the idea of bending towards sleep – what a very interesting and fascinating image this paints – how intimate –
and as others have said, quite the abrupt twist in the ending – quite the counterpoint, all in 44!
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When only moon can soothe… torment and abuse is so chilling… may it just end
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