Poem inspired by the title of Jane Kenyon’s poetic masterpiece, “Briefly it enters, briefly it speaks.”
Bothersome;
they come to me like midnight jasmine,
syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion,
when I write of him—
framing a face of exquisite symmetry is
the moon, lustrous;
far away and yet, it feels like
I can reach and capture, completely.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Bar-tending for the lovely De, the word tonight is “Bother.”Come join us! 💝
Posted for Quadrille #126 @ dVerse Poets Pub
64 Responses
“they come to me like midnight jasmine,
syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion,”
What amazing description as always.
Just beautiful!
Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I find myself wishing that I could be as excited about the night as you are… I am a morning and day person…. darkness weighs heavy on me
Thank you so much, Bjorn 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
A romantic quadrille, Sanaa. I especially love the lines:
‘syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion,
when I write of him’.
Thank you so much, my dearest Kim 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
How sultry and provocative this is!
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I love the idea of syllables singing in the night air. Sometimes I think of lines of poetry as I’m drifting off to sleep, and I tell myself I’ll remember them in the morning, but I never do…
Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Gorgeous Sanaa. Love that midnight jasmine & syllables moody-saccharine.
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I’d like to be bothered in such a way – a gorgeous mellow kind of bother you scribed here
“like crickets singing in slow motion,
when I write of him—”
Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Moondreaming in such a pleasant way! It feels like that time when you’re drowsy, almost asleep…
Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
“Like crickets singing in slow motion” — This simile sent chills up my spine. Exquisite wording Sanaa. 🌹
Thank you so much, Dora 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I especially like this:
“framing a face of exquisite symmetry is
the moon, lustrous;
far away and yet, it feels like
I can reach and capture, completely.”
Thank you so much, Ken 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Very nicely done. Far away yet touchable.. Love the contrasts.
Thank you so much, Dwight 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Oh, so beautiful! Tangible and illusive. I love the crickets singing in slow motion!
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I like the slow-motion crickets and the way your quadrille makes the evening feel like it could last forever.
Thank you so much, K.K 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Tres Romantique, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Wow, Sanaa.
Wow.
Wow.
<3
David
Thank you, thank you! 😀
That nighttime feeling of time slowing to a crawl was perfectly explained by,
“like crickets singing in slow motion”.
A beautiful piece excellently crafted.
Thank you so much, Susan 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
A, you got the NaPoWriMo moon prompt in on this too! Very nice.
Thank you so much, Alexandra 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Your language in this is so beautiful Sanaa! “midnight jasmine,
syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion,”
Ahhhhh! ☺️💕
Thank you so much, Christine 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
an exquisite dalliance with the night .. moon, crickets and wonder!
Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Amazing!
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Ooo – “syllables moody-saccharine” what a great phrase! And I just love a poem about the moon.
Thank you so much, Candy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
far away and yet, it feels like
I can reach and capture, completely.
It is good to have high hopes of accomplishing a desire. Great close Sanaa!
Hank
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Hank 💄❤️
“they come to me like midnight jasmine,
syllables moody-saccharine,”
It amazes how so few words can be so deeply emotive.
Thank you so much, Raivenne 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
I am echoing what so many have already said,
“they come to me like midnight jasmine,
syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion,”
You, dear poetess, have such way with words.
Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Ali 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
This is a beautiful twist to the ‘botherings’ am familiar with, like crickets singing in slow motion when I write of him.
Thank you so much, Kenyanito 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
So romantic, love
… like crickets singing in slow motion…
Nice one Sanaa
Pat
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Beautiful, intriguing as I instinctively knew your quadrille would be … and saved it for close to last … to savor.
Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Beautiful and sensuous – scent and taste and sound and slow languid pace all combine in your lovely quadrille.
Thank you so much, Marion 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Positively swooooooning over these lines, Sanaa:
“syllables moody-saccharine,
like crickets singing in slow motion”
Wonderful.
Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
(and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹
You had me at “midnight jasmine”!
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
lovely!
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This is fabulous Saana! 💖
Especially the three first lines. And as a whole it contains such imagery that it seems much longer then a mere 44 words.
Thank you so much, Helene 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️