Belabouring hurt at Twilight

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Above the clouds a longing takes part, my heart
bleeds while playing with a broken branch in the
evening.

It’s hard to forgive ourselves, while clinging onto
remnants of an impossible past. The sombre sky
and languid flowers, everything’s a muted shade
like a matt photograph in a dimly lit space.

A few years ago I fell apart though in the process
of building myself back up, I learned that amidst
worldly struggles you are allowed to leave a few
broken pieces behind, you are allowed to dream
and become the person that you design yourself
to be.

The calm crepuscular hours, I knelt and poured
my woes into a babbling brook, feeling that the
world was too much with us and yet unfamiliar.

As the last light slips away my eyes open to the
silence of the universe, I’m reminded of beauty,
of hope as the dark comes to write its chapter.

Soon cold and unfeeling rain was falling, above
the clouds a longing takes part, my heart bleeds
while playing with a broken branch in evening.

 

Photo credits: Crepuscule Heinrich Kuhn

I chose to write inspired by “The world is too much with us” by
William Wordsworth.

Posted for “Kerry’s Challenge” @ Real Toads

Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Kerry says:

    It’s hard to forgive ourselves, while clinging onto
    remnants of an impossible past. The sombre sky
    and languid flowers, everything’s a muted shade

    I like the way you have combined emotion with visual elements in this poem. It is deeply introspective.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  2. This is so wise and lovely Sanaa! A beautiful message of hope flows through this. I love the new look of your blog as well!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  3. Brendan says:

    It’s hard to forgive ourselves, while clinging onto /
    remnants of an impossible past.

    This dazzled me. Our fate is never more than bittersweet, but beauty is beyond forgiveness!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Brendan 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  4. Bjorn says:

    I love how you have capture the twilight mood… it’s a moment of choice of finding the right path, but so often we only see the shadows.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❤️

  5. Margaret says:

    the broken branch, the matt photograph… nicely portray the emotional outpouring in this poem

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  6. Vivian Zems says:

    Very vivid imagery you portrayed here with your words. Poignant, yet hopeful write 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  7. Old Egg says:

    What overwhelming sadness oozes out of every line Sanaa, mirroring the sepia photograph.. How real the words appear as the narrator pours out their heart to the reader.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. Jim says:

    A personal rendition of the picture, lovely, Sanaa. Every element of the picture was related to by your words.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  9. kanzensakura says:

    you are allowed to leave a few broken pieces behind,…Great line this! It is hard to forgive oneself but, it is the first step to forgiving other. Wise poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Thotpurge says:

    you are allowed to leave a few
    broken pieces behind… absolutely..well said.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  11. Jae Rose says:

    I love how your opening image transports us into this wonderful piece of self reflection.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  12. Anna :o] says:

    Sad, reflective and beautiful Sanaa.
    Yes, it is okay to leave a few broken pieces behind, for how else do we learn, do we grow.
    A lovely deep write.
    Anna :o]

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anna ☺️ so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Mary says:

    It is good to always keep hope and to remember that one can always dream and change. We can belabor our hurts for a while as we heal, but then allow ourselves to dream again! Beautiful writing, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary ☺️ so good to see you ❤️

  14. I am reminded of books I have read about geishes… remember tomorrow the sun will rise, and everything changes, maybe not in a day, but as certain and the mountains and seas, all will change. Maybe you won’t like the change, but all will change. Happiness awaits you. My Mother told me, in time you will feel different, and it is so.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ☺️

  15. The third stanza says it all for me–we must learn to understand that we don’t need to fix all things about ourselves in order to become our greatest, some peaces work best by remind us of what the world can do to us… True growth happens when we continue to be after our circumstances did our best to keep us from being at all.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. As we grow and move through the hurt and pain that life brings, we do indeed leave pieces behind. But I believe we grow new parts to fill in some of these open spaces…..and that is my dream of wholeness and becoming who I know I can be……beautiful, heartfelt words Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  17. I so relate to “it’s hard to forgive ourselves while clinging onto remnants of an impossible past.” I like the different format and tone you have used here.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. eyes opening to the silence of universe and being reminded of hope…deep !
    we always learn when our mind is at peace…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Neeraj 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  19. gillena says:

    Yes; we must ascend in times of need. Far above the clouds is a good place to be, to look at one’s self and to heal.

    Thank you for dropping by my Sunday Standard Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  20. Such an accomplished, wise and beautiful poem. Like others, I particularly love:

    I learned that amidst
    worldly struggles you are allowed to leave a few
    broken pieces behind, you are allowed to dream
    and become the person that you design yourself
    to be.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️

  21. Myrna says:

    you are allowed to dream
    and become the person that you design yourself
    to be.

    I love this and so many other lines in your poem. Sad, but beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Myrna 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  22. The juxtaposition between bleeding heart and broken branch really got my attention.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. Wendy Bourke says:

    I love the way in which you have woven nature through this stunning and impactful piece … which you have imbued with wonderful ‘old soul’ wisdom. This is beautiful writing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  24. kaykuala says:

    It’s hard to forgive ourselves, while clinging onto
    remnants of an impossible past.

    Very true Sanaa! It gives a strangle hold and keeps bothering all the time!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤️

  25. Magyar says:

    Grand_!
    __ Raindrops bring tomorrow’s growth; new strength overcomes today’s loss of self. _m

    twilight
    I scan this days worth
    raindrops

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magyar 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  26. Leo says:

    This is like a beautiful poetic story! 🙂 Enjoyed reading it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vinay 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

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