An Eye, Open

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The eyes are the mirrors of the soul;
Allowing us to glance inside.
Emotions far beyond control.

For eyes can speak the hidden truth;
Where the mouth has lied.
A whisper follows around our youth.

Though consequences take their toll;
To surroundings keep an open eye.
As emotions are beyond control.

When we glance into the eyes of others;
Unable to look past and see.
The veil of hidden ghastly colors.

From emptiness a heart I stole;
Inspite of being scarred and torn.
Emotions having lost control.

Pierced into the heart deep;
The dagger of his russet eyes.
Weighed beneath a mortal sleep;
Our emotions far beyond control.

 

 

Photo Credits: www.hdwallpapers.im

Form: Villanelle

Posted on Sunday Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

also posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Blogoratti says:

    The eyes do tell a lot about a person, its certainly the window to the innermost part of our core. I enjoyed reading this piece. How are you lovely, enjoy the new week!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Blogoratti,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a wonderful week ahead.

  2. The returning lines works so well for this poem…the eyes are easily seen in this…powerful.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Hannah,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  3. Bjorn says:

    The lies that’s hidden can be seen indeed. I like what you did to the Villanelle.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Bjorn,

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  4. Sumana Roy says:

    it’s always good and wise to keep an eye open…

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  5. Jae Rose says:

    I like this different voice Sanaa – still beautiful but a woman on a mission…sometimes we need to be a little determined to get what we desire..

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

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  6. kaykuala h says:

    There are lots of hidden messages in the eyes only one so sincere and in love that can rightfully guess!
    Nicely done Sanaa!

    Hank

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Hank,

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  7. X says:

    The eyes will tell you much. If one can not look you in the eyes – that will tell you enough. Ha. The mouth tells us many things, but peoples words mean very little these days. Well played on the form.

    1. adashofsunny says:

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  8. vandana says:

    So beautiful really eyes need no words

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Vandana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  9. Old Egg says:

    Outward appearances and protestation are nothing to the emotion felt when looking in another’s eyes. It is as though secrets slip through and make themselves felt.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
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  10. hedgewitch says:

    Eyes can say so much more than words, and so much less, too. I love the last stanza.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Hedgewitch,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  11. Mary says:

    The eyes reveal what words do not. They do not lie, as words can.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Mary,

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  12. Grace says:

    Eyes are indeed the mirrors of our soul, speaking our hidden truths ~ Thanks for joining in Sanaa & wishing you happy weekend ~

    1. adashofsunny says:

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  13. You use yours well, I think, keeping them open to confront whatever is there.

    (Thank you for your lovely and thrilling comment on mine.)

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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      PS: You’re most welcome dear 🙂

  14. Susan says:

    SO much for the barrier between the private life and the knowledge of others. We need only look into eyes! But I suspect that the soul has other tools of moderation to hold passion as something to wonder at rather than to act upon. At any rate “out of control” seems sometimes to truly be a matter of choice as morality grows. I think you write about a kind of reckless innocence that you no longer possess?

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend.
      xoxo

      PS: Basically this poem discussed the fact that the eyes do not lie no matter how hard you try to hide your emotions.

  15. Well, how nice to find a poem dedicated to me. How sweet, Sanaa. Thank you. I find the villanelle difficult, and you have done very well with it. It is true the eyes tell much about a person…..I like the repetition of emotions beyond control, as that is how it feels when one falls under the spell, especially of russet eyes. (What a cool image that is).

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  16. Suyash_J says:

    This was delightful.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Suyash,

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  17. Truedessa says:

    This is a lovely form and the eyes really are the windows of the soul. When I look into someone’s eyes I can see so much more.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Elizabeth

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  18. L. Moon says:

    A sweet dedication for an inspiring friend!!
    Your subject matter fit so well with the form – bravo.
    Hmm I also delved into the eyes as the window to the soul today 🙂
    xoxo

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
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  19. Jamztoma says:

    Hey Sanaa, this was one of my favorites this Sunday.
    You really write wonderful pieces. Good job!!!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello James,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
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  20. Fabulous form and poem….Indeed, ‘For eyes can speak the hidden truth; Where the mouth has lied.’ It is in trying to interpret what we see…the truth or the lie.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  21. You did a great job with the form ~ so true that eyes can tell a lot about a person ~ lovely poem 🙂

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Loredana,

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  22. Wendy Bourke says:

    Beautiful and nuanced – a wonderful luminous rendering of a very tricky form.

    1. adashofsunny says:

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  23. gillena says:

    You choose a wise adage to open your poem and followed through to the end, with a lovely insight to your persona

    Hope today was nice for you; thanks for stopping by my Sunday Lime

    Much love…

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  24. Kerry O'Connor says:

    I think villanelle will perfectly suit your style, especially with your love of rhyming.
    I believe the eyes can tell so much about a person.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Kerry,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
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      xoxo

      PS: I agree 🙂

  25. Debi says:

    For eyes can speak the hidden truth;
    Where the mouth has lied….. so strong! So true.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Debi,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  26. G L Meisner says:

    So good, the rare poem that leaves you hanging. Well done.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Mr Meisner,

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  27. panchali says:

    Absolutely brilliant, Sanaa. Yes, the eyes of a person truly are the windows into the soul… reveals a great deal about the person.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Panchali,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  28. Vinay Leo R. says:

    The eyes are the mirrors of the soul;
    Allowing us to glance inside.
    Emotions far beyond control.

    For eyes can speak the hidden truth;
    Where the mouth has lied.
    A whisper follows around our youth.

    Yes. I so agree with these lines, beautifully crafted. Eyes can be honest even when the words aren’t. Enjoyed the poem. 🙂

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Vinay,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
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  29. Kim Nelson says:

    Like you, I think the eyes tell nearly all. You worked hard to create a pleasing cadence and rhyme scheme.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Kim,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  30. Gail says:

    Beautiful.

    1. adashofsunny says:

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  31. Sara Mcnulty says:

    You have used the form beautifully! That last stanza is mesmerizing.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sara,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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