I am a compulsive liar and a saint,
below a bed of umber sleep and roses.
The lush green fields sleep but roses don’t,
I’ve thought about the heavy weight of hunger.
I think about the heavy weight of hunger,
beyond veins and roots tethering.
Barefoot, I walk where roots are tethering,
I’ve realized, deep down humans are shallow.
Eyes are stern but breath comes in shallow gasps,
I won’t apologize for stardust in bones.
I won’t apologize for stardust in bones,
Even if I’m bare, exposed and vulnerable.
It pains me sometimes to be vulnerable,
I am a compulsive liar and a saint.
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26 Responses
Wow, wow, wow, Sanaa! It’s like this form was made for you. Wonderful!
I can’t pick out a single line because I love the whole thing! 💙💙
Awwww gosh! Thank you so much, Merril 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! 💄💙
(and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🥂
A deftly constructed duplex, Sanaa. I love the way that the repeated words are sometimes off-kilter, as in the lovely lines:
‘The lush green fields sleep but roses don’t’
and
‘Eyes are stern but breath comes in shallow gasps’.
I also love the phrase ‘the heavy weight of hunger’ and those tethering roots.
Thank you so much, my dearest Kim 😀 so glad you liked it 💄💙
Yes, I liked the way this flowed, and especially ‘the tethering roots!
Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄💙
Nice one Sanaa
Happy Thursday
Much💜love
Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so good to see you 💄💙
Much love back 🌷
Oh My! Your poem, the way you used the form … it’s perfect and a joy to read, it’s definitely YOU.
Awwww gosh! Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄💙
I won’t apologize for stardust in bones,
Even if I’m bare, exposed and vulnerable.
I was drawn in by the power of the first line. But the above two turned out to be more poignant.
Thank you so much, Reena 😀 so glad the poem and its imagery appealed to you 💄💙
I love the concluding couplet – this form really suits you Sanaa…
Thank you so much, Andrew 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄💙
Thanks for sharing and baring your soul, Sanaa…we are liars and saints, a bit duplicit in our duplexes, aren’t we?! 😉
We most certainly are! 😉 Thank you so much, Lynn 😀 so glad you liked it 💄💙
The paradoxes resound and the imagery twists our hearts. Brilliant as usual, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Dora 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄💙
Beautifully done, Sanaa. 🙂
Thank you so much, Kitty 😀 so good to see you 💄💙
Sanaa I love how you’ve created this, it really speaks deeply.
Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄💙
This is so well done, Sanaa. I love,
“I won’t apologize for stardust in bones.”
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄💙
Sanaa, I think you’re a poetic genius. Srsly.
Much love,
David
Awww gosh! Thank you so much, David 😀 so glad you liked it 💄💙
Much love back 🥂