Thoughts frighten – rob me late at night
Propelled to draw upon a canvass.
Refuse not, let your mind foresee
To reflect would coerce – drive the soul to madness
No, don’t play with these emotions
You are like a soft gentle breeze.
Oh do tempt me with your hatred;
A smile so slow just meant to tease – what a strange unease
Too late to start – to act like saint
Her cheeks so round! Oh lips so red
Raucous burning inside the chest.
I moaned and trembled from foot to head – oh misled!
Oh every touch makes her cower;
And mere thought of me makes her cringe.
Obsession songful – hour of sport
You can miss me by a mile – miss me by an inch
Photo Credits: wallippo.com
Form: Florette
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82 Responses
This is so steamy… Tempted and temptation can be a dangerous game, but still it’s sweet.
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Subtle sensuality, well-rendered using the form.
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It is steamy with some fear mixed in too. Thank you for trying your hand at a Florette, Sanaa.
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I specially like that last stanza, what an obsession ~ I can sense a hint of fear mixed with passion ~
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Hmmm…..uneasy feelings mixed with possibilities of pleasure. And it’s true many have been driven to madness by this very thing. 😉
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Mixing passion & fear, sensuality & madness, with a subtle,almost abstract, rhyme scheme; lovely work.
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A very sensual poem filled with steam…
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Ooo-la-la…an hour of forbidden (maybe?) fun? I need a fan! 🙂
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This is the other side of the coin of the Vampire described in Mary’s poem. More enticing but just as dangerous!
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That yes, no, push pull feeling!
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The second stanza is a revelation, sends a chill!
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Nicely done. I was really intrigued by the line, “Oh do tempt me with your hatred”
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Love the last line.. Sums it all up.
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Luv the images you presented my favorite line for its reality check
“Obsession songful – hour of sport”
much love…
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Those last two lines finish this poem perfectly – with lots of questions – which is perfect! you have really explored the depths of obsession.
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So very sad when one feels that one’s emotions are being played with. Any relationship in which there seems to be ‘hatred’ is one to rid oneself of, in my opinion.
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oh wow! this is so hot! 🙂
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My reading glasses were steaming up with this sensual verse Sanaa!
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Thoughts frighten – rob me late at night
Propelled to draw upon a canvass.
This is a powerful line … sets the stage nicely.
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love the tension in this poem – an ‘hour of sport’ drawn out in agony and ecstasy. Bravo too with the ‘florette’ verse structure – rose to the challenge beautifully
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You have expressed the uneasiness of the emotions in this poem…..I especially admire “”oh, misled!” You make the reader feel it – so well done.
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Hi Sanaa!
your piece here is all very alluring and telling of sensuality. all the traits of obsession and lust.
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Full of the passion and originality I have come to expect from you, made new yet again. (I must try a Florette!)
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Excellent rendering of the form! Softly sensual but with that slight touch of fear. Good work.
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For all the heat in this encounter there was fear too that perhaps she had let things get away from her and out of control. Let’s hope she has learned something from this.
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Scary! Sort of like an S/M scenario. I don’t like obsession. But you capture it incredibly well. (I wonder if I should use it as a Motif?)
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PS: Sounds like a good idea 🙂 we could do that.
This would make an excellent song. Dark and authentic.
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You have captured the enthralled sense of temptation: fear mixed with a certain longing.
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This is such a sophisticated, sensual poem. So well done Sanaa.
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exotic and sensual – very nicely formed Sanaa
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Oh, it’s better to avoid…. I was struck with the line ‘Raucous burning inside the chest.’ ~ really scary sensations here…..
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Very beautiful, Sanaa 🙂
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I like this very much, Sanaa. Great ending.
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“strange unease” and “raucous burning” culminating in “Obsession songful – hour of sport”; the deep passion & fear truly “drive the soul to madness”….a lovely piece Sanaa…so happy to be participating after a long time 🙂
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Although I have commented before It was good to read this poem again Sanaa. I bow down to passion’s wisdom and let it have its way!
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Your piece is skillfully penned. The weaving together of passion, lust and fear does send chills down the spine. And this line, “Oh do tempt me with your hatred” highlights this obsession. Well done!✨??✨
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That last line is very powerful and speaks of much strength
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I love the last stanza, particularly the last line… which seems to take the entire poem–and all its emotions–and pack them into an inch. Oh, the pressure…
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Sanaa
The greyscale photo is stunning; it resonates all the shadowy spaces in your poem.
Thanks for another intriguing prompt this week
much love…
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You have described perfectly the tension, fear, excitement and lust,,,heading into perhaps a disastrous event, but,,,,perhaps not,, I love the form, not familiar with it, a beautiful flow,,,
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