When slipped in lucid bonds of earth; shall hear
them pine and suffer dearth. When time of dawn
dispels the dark; I watch in time for song of lark.
Life’s embroidered with bloom and thorn; I bade
their eyes not weep or mourn.
Let smiles adorn beloved encased; to form
a lovelier vision with pace. Breathe not on
world with timid breath; those whose gentle
hearts do fear. We leap where others refuse
to tread.
With fervour the poet began to bless
As friend converse with dulcet death.
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Posted for Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Pub
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74 Responses
Love flow of meter and rhyme and the final couplet is like an exclamation point.
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I love this.
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Such beautiful words! I’m getting the impression from this, that it is a deceased person talking, and reassuring those left behind that they shouldn’t fear death. I may be totally wrong about this, though. 🙂
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PS: You caught the essence of the poem beautifully 🙂
This flows like honey, sweet and satisfying.
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This is a lovely response to the prompt with a lovely sense of the words flowing beautifully into each other….well done Sunny…
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Such gorgeous language and meter used here.
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dulcet death….the dead assuring the living. The couplet ties this all together and emphasizes it beautifully.
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“Life’s embroidered with bloom and thorn”. Such beautifully profound line, Sanaa. Love the texture of the imagery! ♥
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Beautiful choice of words and they set the lovely tone and flow.
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Oh yes, beautiful – agree with Victoria.
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What a wonderful way to express sadness…
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A very thoughtfully meditative poem, Sanaa.
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A beautiful example of faith, & it is one of your best poems–terrific inner rhymes, & lyrical movement. I enjoyed this piece very much.
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Lovely rhythm and flow here. 🙂
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Good rhythm in this poem. I really like your final verse.
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“….life’s emroidered with bloom and thorn…” Wonderful line.
I read this silently….and then reread aloud. It’s a beautiful piece.
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I enjoyed this; it has an ethereal quality about it and is reassuring and rhythmic and fine.
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Gorgeous!! I love this:
“Life’s embroidered with bloom and thorn”
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Beautiful piece. I love how you have deliberately chosen to not have the rhymes at the ends of lines …that allows your poem to have the feel of rhyme, but the visual forces the reader to keep moving so that the message of the poem keeps flowing.
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These words so well chosen, seem perfect.
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Exquisite. My favourite line….”Life’s embroidered with bloom and thorn; I bade
their eyes not weep or mourn.”
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I feel depth in your poetry. Very nice creation
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Such richness of words! Lush. Thick. I read aloud to enjoy your work all the more.
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So beautiful and profound….
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I think poetry can be a kind of extreme support – living life with a heightened sense of being without having to be fit or jumping off a cliff edge..when we embrace the ability to express and write..the end should indeed feel ‘ok’
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“Breathe not on the world with timid breath” these are such beautiful and wise words Sanaa and show that we must grasp hold of life so firmly.
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Wonderful to have an opportunity to read your poem a second time! Love the way you expressed this.
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The dead can cross realms to reassure others there is life on the other side..just my opinion. A haunting visitation.
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Lovely flow of words, the reader is led to read the poem in one go.
Enjoyed the poem. 🙂
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Very interesting poetic introduction to “sweet”death.
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What a great couplet at the end! Well structured and written.
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This reads as beautifully as an old classic. I especially admire “dulcet death”.
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This is excellent, Sanaa. I do so look forward to reading your work.
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I enjoyed your creative use of rhyme and meter in this poem. It flowed very well, leaving behind a sweet/sad echo.
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Lovely language with a wonderful flow
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This is mesmerizing … like a haunting incantation.
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Oh, if death could always be dulcet, and such conversations readily available!
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