This has to be at the top of my “Sanaa Favorite” list. Yes, it does read like the blues. And that one line about letting go–so very hard to learn. Bravo, my friend.
I think sometimes the best way is to let go. The part about the white snow showing every step as you go is an intense image for me. Yes, sometimes we must be careful in how we walk.
Yes, this piece seems to break new ground for you, & you have risen to the prompt, a night flower bursting with silly black & blue petals, the blue Navy, hidden in shadow. I like it a lot; very thoughtful. (pardon me while I register for the 50th time in order to comment; smile).
“…often the best way to learn is let go..” LOVE this! And also the idea that our actions, even our words, leave tracks in the snow. Yes…to step lightly wherever we go.
Sanaa – I love how you brought in colors of the sunset, and the breath of an ending day along with memories — the white of the snow with fresh, new beginnings. Beautiful images that evoke both sadness & a quiet comfort. Thanks for sharing.
Lovely! My thought is that there is no use for worrying, but the blues is an entirely different thing. The blues can make you think, and change, and grow. Peace, Linda
I love that the speaker acknowledges the fact that there are things to worry about, but remembers that going through life worrying about everything is no living at all. She sounds like a well-balanced lady. I really like this one, Sanaa. ❤
The construction of this piece works very well for what you want to convey. The physical gasp preceding the vivid physical descriptions, and the progression of the protagonist’s thoughts from there build up the feeling of hope throughout the piece.
I love the magic and wonder of ‘amber, spruce and rose’ and the idea of our lives being like fresh snow..and the footprints we choose to make – superb!
I love this rhythmic poem I especially like the lines “be careful how your tread, for every step will show” and this is so true, often when we look back we can see our footsteps clearly,,,
I like this very much, Sanaa. The way you broke it into three pieces with the gasp, breathe and feel; the way your words painted a picture, gave good advice and finally, an instructional warning. Lovely
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Sanaa, your rhyme gives this a bluesy feel, in addition to all that blue. Wonderful.
Thanks De ❤ so glad you liked it 😀
This has to be at the top of my “Sanaa Favorite” list. Yes, it does read like the blues. And that one line about letting go–so very hard to learn. Bravo, my friend.
That’s so sweet 😀 thank you so much, Victoria ❤️ means a lot to me.
The best way to hold on is to let go… that is an incredible line!!!! Going to stay with me.
Thanks Matthew 🙂 so glad you liked it.
I love the palette and shades of amber, spruce and rose. This certainly has the moody blues to me.
I am so glad you agree, Grace 🙂 thanks for stopping by
I agree that learning to let go is essential. Well expressed 🙂
Most definitely 🙂 thanks Sue.
Beautifully written. You just get better and better!
Thank you so much Rosemary ❤️
“often the best way to hold on is to let go”. What a paradox but oh-so-true. 🙂
Thanks Imelda 🙂
Thanks Sanaa. I think I’ve got the blues now. But the faint glow of sunset lifts me up a bit.
Thank you kindly, Walter 🙂
I think sometimes the best way is to let go. The part about the white snow showing every step as you go is an intense image for me. Yes, sometimes we must be careful in how we walk.
Its definitely something we should keep an eye out for 🙂 thanks for stopping by ❤️
Yes, this piece seems to break new ground for you, & you have risen to the prompt, a night flower bursting with silly black & blue petals, the blue Navy, hidden in shadow. I like it a lot; very thoughtful. (pardon me while I register for the 50th time in order to comment; smile).
Thank you so much, Glenn 🙂 so glad you liked the poem.
“I gasp,” “I breathe,” “I feel”…I like how you start each verse, Sanaa; it helps set the tone for your beautiful verses.
Thank you so much Gayle 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Sanaa, this is beautiful and teeming with optimism. Thank you for the gentle reminder to take things slowly and with ease. 🙂
Glad you feel that way Maria 🙂 thanks for stopping by ❤️
Beautiful, Sanaa! ❤️
Thank you so much Josslyn ❤️
“…often the best way to learn is let go..” LOVE this! And also the idea that our actions, even our words, leave tracks in the snow. Yes…to step lightly wherever we go.
Thank you so much Lillian ❤
Sanaa – I love how you brought in colors of the sunset, and the breath of an ending day along with memories — the white of the snow with fresh, new beginnings. Beautiful images that evoke both sadness & a quiet comfort. Thanks for sharing.
I am so glad you liked it 🙂 thanks Stacie.
Lovely! My thought is that there is no use for worrying, but the blues is an entirely different thing. The blues can make you think, and change, and grow. Peace, Linda
Thank you 🙂 Love your perspective on this Linda ❤
beautifully expressed. Yes, breathing out the blues…..one of your best.
Thanks Toni ❤️ so glad you liked it.
Sigh…hard to let go. Lovely!
Thank you so much Ayala 🙂
Looks like we both “sang the blues” on this one Sanaa! Love your song!
Thank you so much, Walter 🙂 so glad you liked it.
The “gasp, breathe, feel,” construction worked so well with the feelings so beautifully expressed. I really loved it Sanaa.
Thank you so much Robin 🙂 so glad you liked the poem ❤
I love that the speaker acknowledges the fact that there are things to worry about, but remembers that going through life worrying about everything is no living at all. She sounds like a well-balanced lady. I really like this one, Sanaa. ❤
Thank you so much, Magaly ❤ so glad you liked it 😀
The construction of this piece works very well for what you want to convey. The physical gasp preceding the vivid physical descriptions, and the progression of the protagonist’s thoughts from there build up the feeling of hope throughout the piece.
Thank you Rommy 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your images read like praise to nature’s creation and the video awesome in support
enjoyed enjoyed enjoyed
much love…
Thank you so much Gillena ❤️
Let memories cast their glow
And cherish all that we know
Wonderful lines Sanaa! Yes, if memories were to help us to recall then it would be such a glorious picture to see!
Hank
I am so glad you agree 🙂 thanks for stopping by
The best way to hold on is to learn to let go… Yes, it is. A hard lesson to accept though!
Definitely! Thank you so much Freya ❤
I love the magic and wonder of ‘amber, spruce and rose’ and the idea of our lives being like fresh snow..and the footprints we choose to make – superb!
Thanks Jae ❤ so glad you liked it 😀
I love this rhythmic poem I especially like the lines “be careful how your tread, for every step will show” and this is so true, often when we look back we can see our footsteps clearly,,,
Definitely 🙂 thank you so much ❤️
I like this very much, Sanaa. The way you broke it into three pieces with the gasp, breathe and feel; the way your words painted a picture, gave good advice and finally, an instructional warning. Lovely
Thank you so much Debi 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️