English Plums

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Leave me whole
as vibrant, as full of potential as English plums
placed under the darkening sky,
where pain is audibleβ€”
I have witnessed the ushering cries of newborns
and hopes
of estranged lovers a thousand times,
each more harrowing than the last;
why do we hide behind the skin of clouds
knowing
subconscious is but quiet fragments that move
with the whisper of rain?

The answers discovered at long last liberate me,
so much
so that I run out of excuses
to run
from my own limbs
and bonesβ€”
do we ever truly escape all that lies in waiting for us?
The wind continues to blow blurry and soft.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Elena Klimenko art, Pinterest

Sarah hosts at dVerse and invites us to write a poem
in response
to something we have read over the last year. πŸ’

I chose Rainer Maria Rilke and his poem β€˜At The Brink Of Night.β€˜ Come join us! πŸ™‚

Posted for Poetics: “A conversation,” @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Lillian says:

    Just beautiful as always, Sanaa. That final question and sentence just burn into my soul at the end of reading this. Stunning!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Sarah Connor says:

    Oh, Sanaa, this shimmers and shines. That second stanza is amazing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  3. Grace says:

    I so love that vibrant color of plums. That last line moves delicately:
    The wind continues to blow blurry and soft.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. msjadeli says:

    Such fantastical meanderings through fantasy. You chose a good one to speak to, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. The age-old question — is it choice or destiny! I enjoyed your journey to the culmination of that question. Well written.,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. Ricardo says:

    I like your choice and the liberation is specially appealing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ricardo πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Rilke rules, and so do you. Your night time contemplation is smooth as ten year old bourbon, and it warms the heart and gut. I liked,” Why do we hide behind the skin of clouds..”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. Kerfe says:

    The last 2 lines are especially poignant, and hold the feeling of Rilke’s poem stretched between them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerfe πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. knowing
    subconscious is but quiet fragments that move
    with the whisper of rain?

    Yes❣️

    Lovely.

    -David

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, David πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Rilke is one of my favourite poets – I wrote a prize-winning project on his poetry, which I also translated, when I was in sixth form. I’m so glad that you chose his poem with which to have a conversation. I love the plum simile in the opening lines and the cloud metaphor is so delicate. Questions on the brink of being answered – but not quite.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Kim πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Misky says:

    This is wonderfully imagined, particularly “hide behind the skin of clouds”. Nicely done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Misky πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Jane Dougherty says:

    I love that you’ve gone from violins to plums with your reply. And the Rilke makes me wish I knew German!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. calmkate says:

    this is so zen, a koan, a nebulous philosopher … posing questions with no right answer! Life unfolds as it’s meant to …

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Dora says:

    Love your response to Rilke’s poem! You capture his beautiful tone of reverie and connection to the immediacy of the world.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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