Because it’s my heart
I laid it bare like an orange
open as sun.
Photo credits: Vladimir Volegov~ Beautiful lady by the roadside
A Senryu birthed from the following two prompts:
Of Poems and Fruit & Because It Is My Heart ~ Micro Poetry
Posted on Weekend Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads
and Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
48 Responses
Beautifully compared!
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
The scent of orange hangs in the morning air!
A lovely poem.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
I really like the effect of that comparison. How the second line can leave one feeling that said orange might be easy to eat or disposed of, but… not the sun–that sun can warm and give life and burn everything.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt) 🌹
I kind of love the way the first line steered the rest. The subject owns the fact that it is their choice to be vulnerable, their choice to share some of that sweetness. But I can see the last line as a bit of a warning too, similarly to what Magaly said. That choice for sweetness and warmth is there, but never forget that the sun can be cruel as well as kind.
Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Oh, this is really beautiful, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Yes. Luscious and fragrant with a tangy note of yin.
Thank you so much, Brendan 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Hearts are quite strong but break easily from other pressures, so we imagine. I think it worries more about keeping us alive than finding a suitable partner for us…but what do I know?
Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
It’s always a risk to lay bare one’s heart, but with risks often come rewards.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, MMT ❤️
Wow!
❤️❤️❤️❤️
Gorgeous…painting and words.
Thank you so much, Cressida 😀 so good to see you ❤️
simply gorgeous!
and i love the title, goes so well with the poem. so much said in so little words. 🙂
Thank you so much, Lee San 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
The title and the poem are precious. Wonderful writing Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Myrna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
OMG this is just awesome
Happy you dropped by my sumie Sunday today Sanaa
Much❤🕊❤love
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
Much🌹🌻🌷love
Sanaa- such beauty in so few words, and I love the title!
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Sanaa, I can’t even say how much I love this short collection of powerful words. Because my heart is my most vulnerable thing, I made it as vulnerable as I could. That’s love. Courageous and full. Understanding the value of vulnerability even with its risk. I’m going to carry the spirit of this poem with me for a while. Incredible. Thank you!
Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, H. Hennenburg 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! ❤️
Everything about this is brightly heart wrenching.
Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Absolutely juicy 🙂 Beautiful.
Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I sense the power to express vulnerability in this poem. Beautiful
Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
Love it! This is exquisite … a beautifully nuanced, sensual senryu.
Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
I love the vulnerability shown here…beautiful.
Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Love the poem and the painting!
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Heart like an orange is an interesting image!
Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
That’s a great title, Sanaa, and such an honest, colourful and warm senryu, with a hint of darkness in the shadow of its ambiguity..
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
Short and sweet, Sanaa!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️