Winter Moon ~ Part three: Petals of the Sun

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I watch as they remain unflinching,
petals of the sun
while the wicked wind whips the snow,
and darkness slowly descends.
How do we restore balance in the world?
How do we dispel negative gravity?
I wake without reason to logical fallacies,
sly in apparitionβ€”
speak not of the sky,
drowning choke of smoke and fire
for fear that mercy is evidently misplaced,
I slip on the straps and release a sigh.
Come ink words in the blind,
watch as grey headed canaries break free
from cagesβ€”
my love is unselfish but I require you
to breathe,
coffee lips in the throes of death
and change,
perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong;
forever cannot draw a circle.

 

Photo credits: ‘Petals of the Sun,’ by Manabu Oda, Pinterest

Skylover Wordlist: apparition, gravity, canary, circle ❀

Posted for the Writers’ Pantry @ Poets and Storytellers United

Comments

  1. Thotpurge says:

    Lovely close, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€

  2. I don’t think I’ve ever read a more beautiful expression of despair β€” yet it is hopeful too in spite of all, and a wonderful embodiment of Magaly’s suggestions. It does all come down to your question, I think: β€˜How do we restore balance in the world?’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh!πŸ’„β€ Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you!πŸ’„β€

  3. Jae Rose says:

    Wonderful imagery

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€

  4. Toni Spencer says:

    You are branching out both in style and form. I like it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€

  5. kaykuala h says:

    perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong;
    forever cannot draw a circle.

    one expect to take wrong turns some of the time!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Hank πŸ’„β€

  6. “How do we restore balance”, indeed. It’s seems so much is become un-whole these days. Maybe we can heal some of the breaking through ink (that inspires action), through words that remind us that even in disaster we can find some beauty, through writings like this one.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€

  7. Unflinching jumps out at me. Maybe we can draw a forever spiral.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€

  8. gillena says:

    “forever cannot draw a circle.”
    A point of absorbtion, my ponder for today. A blessed Sunday to you Sanaa

    Much❀love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€

      A blessed Sunday to you too
      Much❀love…

  9. I like the image in the opening lines of the petals of the sun unflinching β€˜while the wicked wind whips the snow’, and how you used alliteration to recreate the sound of the wind, Sanaa. I also like the visual oxymoron in:
    β€˜Come ink words in the blind,
    watch as grey headed canaries break free
    from cages’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€

  10. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    When I think of petals of the sun I can also see the moon as being a mere mirror of the sun.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€

  11. Jim says:

    Sunflowers are tough, they withstand the hot sun and the cold snowy winds. I find only one real word of hope here, just a smidgen, in the word, HOPE itself.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€

  12. Bev says:

    Great write…and that last line is inspired!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€

  13. There is so much going on here, Sanaa. Very good but this:
    “fear that mercy is evidently misplaced”
    reminds me that there is a judgement day coming because as you allude to, the world must balance.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Joel πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€

  14. marja says:

    Beautiful poem and these last lines
    “perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong;
    forever cannot draw a circle.” Amazing

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marja πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€

  15. Old Egg says:

    Life does have its ups and downs so we should always be thankful for the good times and remember them in the bad. Lives do have a full circle so we should never put off what we could do now!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€

  16. Wendy Bourke says:

    Beautiful writing …. and once again, you close on a line that emanates an echo. You do that so wonderfully well, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€

  17. I am so intrigued by the thought of misplaced mercy and the statement that “forever cannot draw a circle” and the fact that our mortal senses will never be able to absorb the reality of it all anyway. Wonderful writing and concepts.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, H.Hennenburg πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€

  18. How do we know what is balance these days? I love this poem. It makes me search my own spirit and ask how and where is my balance. “perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong; forever cannot draw a circle.” Love that line

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€

  19. ZQ says:

    “forever cannot draw a circle.” profound!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, ZQ πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€

  20. Negative gravity is so hard to dispel hence, the sadness the world is feeling in 2020. Let’s hope the world keeps breathing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Bekkie πŸ’„β€

  21. The line about a gray-headed canary is striking to me. this poem is fascinating!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jenna πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. […] for the dverse prompt of 9/7/21, derivatives, using Sanaa Rivi’s line “Perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong; forever cannot draw a circle.” from Winter Moon ~ Part Three: Petals of the Sun“ […]

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