Veil me (not)

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Hidden or lost, obscured from view
Yet frore of night distills the dew ―
Adrift, I sway like ripples on pond
as magnolia blossoms fall from tree.
Oh heart of mine, possess strength (unbind)
I long for conscience to release load of mind
Aware glimpse of orb enshrouded in smoke
I ebb into the depths of mountains and sea.
Though soul feels like rose amongst thorns,
Oh veil me (not) from the all–knowing sun.
I long for compunction to stray from psyche,
to shine with beatitude like the stars at night.

 

 

Photo credits: Rebloggy

Kerry asks us to write inspired by works of Rainer Maria Rilke.
Poem chosen: I am much too alone in this world, yet not alone

Posted on Literary Excursions @ Real Toads

For my prompt “Attitudes are contagious, is yours worth catching” on 13th
January at 8:00 am EDT

Posted for poems written on Prompt Nights 

and posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Pub

Comments

  1. paul scribbles says:

    Wow…such poetry. Is this a call for freedom?…for release?…for pure being-ness?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely!❤️ You always interpret my poems so nicely, Paul 🙂

      Good to see you!

  2. Grace says:

    Specially like this part:

    Adrift, I sway like ripples on pond
    as magnolia blossoms fall from tree.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 🙂 so glad you liked it❤️

  3. Frank Hubeny says:

    I liked the phrase: “soul feels like rose amongst thorn”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Frank 🙂 good to see you ❤️

  4. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    To be released to the night like this. Wonderful and dreamy.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  5. Brendan says:

    There is tension here, an imprisoned sense of standing at a threshold of the sublime and not being able to cross over. This is the poet’s dilemma, and the challenge of our life’s work! Great take on the challenge.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Brendan 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  6. Kerry O'Connor says:

    The relationship between the human consciousness and the things is held in a tender balance in your poem, Sanaa. Beautifully done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. debi says:

    to shine with beatitude like the stars at night…… oh, but you do and so do your words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aw!❤️ Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so good to have you back!❤️

  8. gillena says:

    “I long for compunction to stray from psyche,”

    Luv the angst in this feeling write, the torture of the soul is in ernest

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena ❤️ so glad you liked it 🙂

  9. I learned a new word today: “frore”. I like it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 good to see you ❤️

  10. So beautiful, with a gorgeous closing line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

  11. Ellecee says:

    “To shine with beatitude as the stars at night” “to stray from psyche”
    Longings I can relate to,; I enjoyed your lovely poem so much 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 good to see you! ❤️

  12. bkmackenzie says:

    such a graceful line – “to shine with beatitude like stars at night…lovely…bkm

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mackenzie 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Rommy says:

    Swaying like ripples on a pond sounds lovely. LOL, I need to make more time for real relaxation.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy ❤️ good to see you 🙂

  14. Oloriel says:

    Beautiful and enchanting poetry, I loved the form, the rhymes and the hoping and wishing at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Oloriel 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  15. A wonderful balladic plea for clarity, truth, joy–to be enjoyed as unfettered. As poets our quills do shatter chains, counterpoint negativity, celebrating life, love, and spirituality. Thanks for the reinforcement & poetic hug.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 good to see you ❤️

  16. Kay says:

    Your descriptive ability is awe-inspiring in this, Sanaa. I very much felt the yearning of a soul that craves freedom. ?

    Kay

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kay ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

  17. CC says:

    Oh, one’s soul should always feel like a rose among thorns! Beautiful imagery, Sanaa 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, C.C 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. Barry D says:

    I feel a yearning to be set free to just… be…

    This is a most enjoyable sentiment… loved the tranquil metaphors.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  19. I’ve only just come back after a short break to grieve my mother’s passing, so I hadn’t seen this poem, Sanaa. It is so beautifully lyrical and wistful, with gentle movement in the distilling dew, ripples and the blossoms falling.

    1. Sanaa says:

      I am so sorry to hear that 🙁 please accept my deepest condolences.. hugs

  20. As always, I adore your luscious phrases.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

  21. kaykuala h says:

    I long for compunction to stray from psyche,
    to shine with beatitude like the stars at night.

    One craves for the bright side of things. Love the hopeful thoughts of expectations!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  22. grapeling says:

    always hidden it seems ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, M 🙂

  23. ladyleemanila says:

    Though soul feels like rose amongst thorns,
    Oh veil me (not) from the all–knowing sun.
    such a lovely poem, Sanaa 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ladylee 🙂 good to see you ❤️

  24. Jae Rose says:

    I love the rhyme – almost like casting a wish or spell 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  25. kunal says:

    Lovely piece! Well done, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kunal 🙂 good to see you ❤️

  26. Bryan Ens says:

    This is beautiful, Sanaa

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bryan 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

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