Hidden or lost, obscured from view
Yet frore of night distills the dew ―
Adrift, I sway like ripples on pond
as magnolia blossoms fall from tree.
Oh heart of mine, possess strength (unbind)
I long for conscience to release load of mind
Aware glimpse of orb enshrouded in smoke
I ebb into the depths of mountains and sea.
Though soul feels like rose amongst thorns,
Oh veil me (not) from the all–knowing sun.
I long for compunction to stray from psyche,
to shine with beatitude like the stars at night.
Photo credits: Rebloggy
Kerry asks us to write inspired by works of Rainer Maria Rilke.
Poem chosen: I am much too alone in this world, yet not alone
Posted on Literary Excursions @ Real Toads
For my prompt “Attitudes are contagious, is yours worth catching” on 13th
January at 8:00 am EDT
Posted for poems written on Prompt Nights
and posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Pub
Wow…such poetry. Is this a call for freedom?…for release?…for pure being-ness?
Definitely!❤️ You always interpret my poems so nicely, Paul 🙂
Good to see you!
Specially like this part:
Adrift, I sway like ripples on pond
as magnolia blossoms fall from tree.
Thank you so much, Grace 🙂 so glad you liked it❤️
I liked the phrase: “soul feels like rose amongst thorn”
Thank you kindly, Frank 🙂 good to see you ❤️
To be released to the night like this. Wonderful and dreamy.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
There is tension here, an imprisoned sense of standing at a threshold of the sublime and not being able to cross over. This is the poet’s dilemma, and the challenge of our life’s work! Great take on the challenge.
Thank you so much, Brendan 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
The relationship between the human consciousness and the things is held in a tender balance in your poem, Sanaa. Beautifully done.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
to shine with beatitude like the stars at night…… oh, but you do and so do your words.
Aw!❤️ Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so good to have you back!❤️
“I long for compunction to stray from psyche,”
Luv the angst in this feeling write, the torture of the soul is in ernest
much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena ❤️ so glad you liked it 🙂
I learned a new word today: “frore”. I like it!
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 good to see you ❤️
So beautiful, with a gorgeous closing line.
Thank you so much, Sherry ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀
“To shine with beatitude as the stars at night” “to stray from psyche”
Longings I can relate to,; I enjoyed your lovely poem so much 🙂
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 good to see you! ❤️
such a graceful line – “to shine with beatitude like stars at night…lovely…bkm
Thank you so much, Mackenzie 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Swaying like ripples on a pond sounds lovely. LOL, I need to make more time for real relaxation.
Thank you so much, Rommy ❤️ good to see you 🙂
Beautiful and enchanting poetry, I loved the form, the rhymes and the hoping and wishing at the end.
Thank you so much, Oloriel 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
A wonderful balladic plea for clarity, truth, joy–to be enjoyed as unfettered. As poets our quills do shatter chains, counterpoint negativity, celebrating life, love, and spirituality. Thanks for the reinforcement & poetic hug.
Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 good to see you ❤️
Your descriptive ability is awe-inspiring in this, Sanaa. I very much felt the yearning of a soul that craves freedom. ?
Kay
Thank you so much, Kay ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀
Oh, one’s soul should always feel like a rose among thorns! Beautiful imagery, Sanaa 🙂
Thank you so much, C.C 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I feel a yearning to be set free to just… be…
This is a most enjoyable sentiment… loved the tranquil metaphors.
Thank you so much, Barry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I’ve only just come back after a short break to grieve my mother’s passing, so I hadn’t seen this poem, Sanaa. It is so beautifully lyrical and wistful, with gentle movement in the distilling dew, ripples and the blossoms falling.
I am so sorry to hear that 🙁 please accept my deepest condolences.. hugs
As always, I adore your luscious phrases.
Thank you so much, Rosemary ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀
I long for compunction to stray from psyche,
to shine with beatitude like the stars at night.
One craves for the bright side of things. Love the hopeful thoughts of expectations!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
always hidden it seems ~
Thank you kindly, M 🙂
Though soul feels like rose amongst thorns,
Oh veil me (not) from the all–knowing sun.
such a lovely poem, Sanaa 🙂
Thank you so much, Ladylee 🙂 good to see you ❤️
I love the rhyme – almost like casting a wish or spell 🙂
Thank you so much, Jae 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Lovely piece! Well done, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Kunal 🙂 good to see you ❤️
This is beautiful, Sanaa
Thank you so much, Bryan 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️