Untitled (when words crumble and fade)

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Breathless beneath a glimmering moon,
Lie as troubled waters kiss my lips shut.
Unsullied, as a rose, I plead and protest
I, shatter dawn, with a piercing screech.

With madness flushed among the vines,
Sought, to perceive, with crystalline cry.
The heart inflicted bears tales of horror,
I, choke on trepidation, a septic stream.

Believe only shades of grey make up life
Oh! long to recover, a struggle to escape
Pristine as an orchid gather my strength
I swirl, across pond, with song and seed.

‘I have no mouth and I must scream.’

 

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Posted on Poems in April @ Real ToadsΒ 

and on Dark Poetry for Cruellest Month

Comments

  1. The structure of this poem–especially the last lines of the first and second stanzas–is brilliant. The pause between the “I” and the rest of the line makes us feel that we are drowning with her, losing our breath… And when we get to the end and understand why. Powerful, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  2. Gina says:

    Mesmerising words. A silent scream that speaks so many words XXX

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gina πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  3. Sharon Rawson says:

    I agree with Magaly! I felt I was drowning, suffocating as I read your words! You accomplished beautifully the real feel of outrage for me!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sharon πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  4. Esther says:

    I lost my breath sometime during the first line and didn’t realize until I had to gasp for air. Felt like I was drowning along with her… Powerfully written!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Esther πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  5. Very beautiful writing. I especially love the closing stanza. The image is very beautiful too.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  6. Rommy says:

    It made me think of Ophelia and madness drowned her mind before the water claimed her body.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Oh gosh πŸ˜€ Thank you so much, Rommy❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  7. paul scribbles says:

    It may be just me but there is hope in the last line of the final stanza…song and seed.

    1. Sanaa says:

      There definitely is ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Paul πŸ™‚

  8. Kerry says:

    Wow! The septic stream really drove the message home for me.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  9. De Jackson says:

    I love that comma at “I, shatter dawn.”
    I think she is becoming just that, a “shatter dawn.” A breaking. A release, and a new beginning. I simply love this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      (I love that particular stanza too! πŸ™‚ )

  10. Silent screams are the most terrifying… This is haunting.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  11. Every detail builds inexorably. We know there is no reprieve for her. I too thought of Ophelia (though she had voice for random singing).

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  12. Wow, Sanaa! The silent scream is most haunting. How powerfully captured the horrors that inflict a heart, and I choked too with this line: “I, choke on trepidation, a septic stream.” Well-written, like the structure too.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❀️ Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it!❀️

  13. Shelle says:

    Just brilliant! It reminds me of trying to scream when in a dream… wanting to escape the nightmare but impossible to find your voice.. powerful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Shelle πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  14. Jim says:

    Somehow I perceive a personification of a dandelion seed and fuzz, with justification coming at the end, “with song and seed.” Am I close?
    This was a nice write, Sanaa, making a nice read. Always alert to decode the movement in the episode.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

      (It could be that)

  15. β€˜I have no mouth and I must scream.’

    That is such a great line! And it sums up one of the major problems with the world right now… so many feel they have no voice.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Emma πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. Ashtoreth says:

    I am reminded of Ophelia in this poem and of how she must as felt before the waters claimed her. Very powerful — and potent reminder of why we should revive Ophelia and listen to her voice.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ashtoreth πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

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