Untitled (a lady writing in detail)

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Word count, syllables, symbolism
perhaps something related to sea.
Line breaks feeling as though one
taking a walk along the sidelines.

Breathe its not just about similes,
pour your heart into your sonnet.
Every inch of me yearned for love
that bursts unto sky as fireworks!

This I give to you, a poem written
from the depths of my chaste soul.
Yet drops of rain and burning ash
speak of desires that were untold.

 

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Posted for “Literary Excursions” @ Real Toads

Posted on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

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Comments

  1. Excellent! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  2. Barry D says:

    And such exquisite detail you’ve woven here!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  3. Superb writing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  4. gillena says:

    Sanaa, Luv the dual passion of writer /lover in your second stanza

    Much love…

    1. debi says:

      I enjoyed every word and emotion of this

      1. Sanaa says:

        Thank you so much, Debi πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

    2. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  5. Kerry says:

    Ah, the final lines really clinch it for me.. So much more is left unsaid between the lines!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwwww!❀️ Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it!❀️

      (and thank you for the challenging prompt)

  6. “Yet drops of rain and burning ash / speak of desires that were untold.” Great last lines of yearning, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  7. Those untold desires do tend to sneak in, don’t they?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Most definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Magaly πŸ˜€

  8. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Yes it’s what’s between the lines that counts.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❀️ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn πŸ™‚

  9. Rene says:

    I love the idea of talking a walk instead of taking a walk — especially when talking to myself. πŸ™‚

    The last stanza is mighty powerful, girl.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rene πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  10. victoria says:

    Soulful, deeply stirring and beautiful! Such wonderful writing… I could feel as though this could be a song, such beautiful lyrics ! Just feels very moving and strong ! Love this!
    Victoria

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Victoria πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  11. I’m imagining myself walking the beach as I read. Is there something left untold?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Tons❀️ thanks for stopping by, Colleen πŸ™‚

  12. annell4 says:

    I wasn’t sure if you meant “Talking a walk on the sidelines.” But if that is what you meant, it is brilliant!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      It was!❀️ Thanks for stopping by, Annell πŸ™‚

  13. gillena says:

    Thank you for linking this to Monday WRites Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      My pleasure, Gillena ❀

      Much love…

  14. Julian says:

    Love the last stanza, Sanaa. Most enjoyable read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Julian πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

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