They say only the south wind flattens grass;
blows through with a force, a song so confidently sung
as easy as summer daydreams—
won’t you take a moment and hear what it has to say?
I have always loved the wind;
loved the way its giddy currents flow through woodland canopies
unaware
of how it can soothe those who can sense,
there are times when I can feel it within, the push and swirl
that stirring to show what is solidly there—
the myriad hues of new beginnings are punctuated
in shafts of pink light
one need only open their eyes and see;
the wind instills the willingness to lay bare one’s heart and soul
despite the chance that both could end up sliced to ribbons.
Photo credits: Boreas – John William Waterhouse Painting, Pinterest
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42 Responses
Snap! We chose the same title, Sanaa! I love that your wind has plenty to sing about and much to say, and those giddy currents that ‘flow through woodland canopies / unaware / of how it can soothe those who can sense’ I also love the movement you have captured in this poem.
Yes we most certainly did! I just came from reading yours and absolutely loved it! Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
The wind can be a bit like a deceptive lover… it hurts, but how can you deny the south wind to do what it likes?
I like the way you think, Bjorn 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Oh, there’s some lovely alliteration there, Sanaa – all those s and sh sounds, moving through the poem like the wind itself. And the ending is one of those that casts back meaning over the poem, changes the mood utterly. Lovely stuff.
Yayyy! Thank you so much, Sarah 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
(and thank you for the glorious prompt)
Well done!
‘the wind instills the willingness to lay bare one’s heart and soul’ — I really like this line! I know where you’re coming from.
Thank you so much, Francis 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
“I have always loved the wind;
loved the way its giddy currents flow through woodland canopies
unaware
of how it can soothe those who can sense,
there are times when I can feel it within, the push and swirl
that stirring to show what is solidly there—
the myriad hues of new beginnings are punctuated
in shafts of pink light”
So utterly beautiful. Swoon.
Thank you so much, Lucy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
“the myriad hues of new beginnings are punctuated
in shafts of pink light”
Beautiful lines, Sanaa. I love the feeling of the wind on my skin.
Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
I love the flow of your words here, Sanaa – just brilliant:
‘the push and swirl
that stirring to show what is solidly there—’
I love the succession of sibilants, and the message carried by your flow of words:
‘the wind instills the willingness to lay bare one’s heart and soul
despite the chance that both could end up sliced to ribbons.’
-that’s poetry!
Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
The south winds are most always welcome in my part of the world. I love your poem and you’ve chosen one of my favorite Waterhouse paintings to accompany it. Thank you for both.
Thank you so much, Beverly 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
I really like the concluding lines!
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It’s a great close alright, Sanaa, but I’m loving those summer daydreams. Well done.
Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
so joyful and cheerful lulls into a sense of well being “one need only open their eyes and see” then your last line …
Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Beautifully rendered, Sanaa! I love these lines “I have always loved the wind;
loved the way its giddy currents flow through woodland canopies
unaware
of how it can soothe those who can sense,”
Thank you so much, Eugenia 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Beautiful. I love the wind!
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There is a lovely rhythm in your words … like that of wind, a gentle loving wind.
Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
snap too with me and the title but the way your wrought this wind is so swirly and caressingly beautiful
Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
All the elements have a wide range of actions and reactions, and you have captured well the wind’s tides. I like especially the giddy currents.
Thank you so much, Kerfe 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
This is both beautiful and powerful. Well written.
Thank you so much, Rob 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
I have always loved the wind, too. Beautiful.
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Oh how lovely this is Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
The wind does have a voice, almost empathic in the way it can echo our moods or emotions.
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Ken 💄❤️
Those final two lines carry the weight of this whole piece. Just beautiful.
Thank you so much, Misky 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️