The Plain Sense of Things

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Endlessly
the buds and leaves
echo what’s left of longing
as I lie beneath
dark and dismal night.
I wish to drown
what was once harbored
lest thoughts of you kiss
jaded lips
never have I felt you closer
yet so far from me.

 

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Posted for QuadrilleΒ #65 @ dVerse Pub

And on Tuesday Platform @ Real ToadsΒ 

Comments

  1. V.J. Knutson says:

    Tugs on the heartstrings – beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, V.J πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  2. A very romantic piece with an existential twist as a capper; nice. It is well suited to be read aloud as well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  3. Jill Lyman says:

    Ah, the conundrum! So well expressed.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jilly πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  4. HA says:

    Oh, the longing is heartwarming here, with that feeling of being so close and yet so far. I loved this bit: “lest thoughts of you kiss/jaded lips”.
    Hoping that the drowning would lead to a new beginning. Something harbored has to be let go at times after all.
    A thoroughly evocative verse. <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! ❀️ Thank you so much, Anmol πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it! ❀️

  5. jo says:

    Romantic with a touch of melancholy – lovely!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jo πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  6. Physical distance….so difficult for a relationship. Yet even when some are close, they are so far away. So glad you posted to the prompt!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  7. Grace says:

    Filled with intense longing and sadness. Thanks for joining in Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  8. Dwight L. Roth says:

    Becoming unharbored … an interesting concept. Yet, happens to so many. Losing touch with what once anchored them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  9. Truedessa says:

    A bittersweet journey, sometimes I think there isn’t enough water to drown out the longing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Truedessa ❀️

  10. A wistful, almost melancholy, romantic quadrille, Sanaa. I like the oxymoron in the lines:
    ‘I wish to drown
    what was once harbored’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  11. Thotpurge says:

    the buds and leaves
    echo what’s left of longing… like the silence of that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  12. Gina says:

    such deep longing, no regrets just wanting to be close again, your poetry evokes such deep passion

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gina πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. Jane Dougherty says:

    Yes, unhappiness.

    1. Sanaa says:

      😬😬😬

  14. Pat says:

    Intense. Romantic. Longing is palpable, and the pacing is exquisite. Nicely done!

    Pat

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pat πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  15. Vicki says:

    I love the dreamy quality of this lovely poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vicki πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  16. Goodness, THIS is just beautiful:
    “the buds and leaves
    echo what’s left of longing”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  17. Toni Spencer says:

    so near and yet so far…that is the essence of this

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Toni ❀️

  18. Beautiful, especially “echo what’s left of longing”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dr. Crystal πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  19. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    That longing sounds so final… as if a great distance has opened up between you.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  20. Ah, sad paradox … in poetry more beautiful and assured than ever.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  21. So beautifully written Sanaa, and that last line is stunning!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  22. Old Egg says:

    Yes that pain of longing is so strong isn’t it. Often when I read your sad poems Sanaa, I feel you need a hug. Sorry about that!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  23. Helen L Dehner says:

    You never disappoint with the poety you write or the images that accompany them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  24. Jim says:

    A fading romance well portrayed. Really liked this, been there done that. Closeness is habit forming in a way, then one will call a stop with a hint of resuming.
    Thanks for hosting.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Jim ❀️

  25. Kerry says:

    The final lines add a bitter sweet conclusion to this love poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  26. Beautiful, those lines of closeness from a distance.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  27. love this, especially the pathos in the end “never have I felt you closer
    yet so far from me.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

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