The Hour Until Dawn

New thoughts bounce around
inside my head as fireflies did
when I used to gaze at stars
in hopes of persuading the
dark and disheartening night.
Surrender to inner voice that
beckons from deep inside the
subconscious  it’s the only
way to emerge unconquered.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted on ‘Quadrille #48′ @ dVerse Pub

and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

& on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

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58 thoughts on “The Hour Until Dawn

  1. There’s so much hope in this, Sanaa! I love this phrase:

    “New thoughts bounce around
    inside my head as fireflies did”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank ☺️ so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. De Jackson says:

    Any mention of fireflies gets my vote, every time. Beautiful, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De ☺️ so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  3. Wolfsrosebud says:

    I hope there are still fireflies and gazing stars…

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️

  4. Victoria says:

    An especially deep and lovely meditative type poem, Sanaa. I, too, love those fireflies, the light in darkness. Sadly, we don’t have them in the Western US. Sometimes my thought bounce around like that–I’ve always called it monkey mind but I like the idea of fireflies better.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh❤️ Thank you so much,Victoria ☺️ so glad you liked it❤️

      (Monkey mind sounds cute😄)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Angelique 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤

  5. Frank says:

    I like surrendering to the inner voice to remain unconquered.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so good to see you ❤

  6. Truedessa says:

    I really like the image of thoughts bouncing around much like fireflies. A moment of enlightenment perhaps.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  7. An especially intriguing last line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Judy 🙂 so good to see you ❤

  8. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    But we do need darkness to see the stars…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❤

  9. Janice says:

    I like your image of bouncing fireflies 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Janice 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  10. Thoughts and fireflies – a wonderful comparison,. Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤

  11. Your poem sounds very close to me, whispers in my ears, literally. I saw the fireflies and the disheartening night. “Emerge unconquered” – I really liked that notion.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh!❤ Thank you so much, Mariya 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤

  12. Debi says:

    Thoughts like fireflies…… so apt as they glow all over the place… hither and thither…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  13. Love that link between stars and fireflies …. very powerful image right there.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤

  14. gillena says:

    Some interesting thoughts bounced to us readers Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so good to see you ❤

  15. Dwight says:

    I loved collecting fireflies in a jar. Your metaphor of light in a jar and light within is perfect! Great photo as well!
    Dwight

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  16. Timoteo says:

    Love this…yes, it’s that inner voice that we must pay attention to!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Timoteo 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  17. blak asper says:

    I love the stars/dark rhyme. And the ending gave me chills. Nice:

    “it’s the only
    way to emerge unconquered”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Asper 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤

  18. I love your poem, and I love fireflies!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  19. Oh, we so need hope and new vision. Listen to that inner voice!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Susie ❤

  20. Old Egg says:

    What a delight this poem is Sanaa. I think we both admire and are jealous of fireflies wishing we too had the ability to really shine.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤

  21. Xenia Tran says:

    I love the idea of thoughts as fireflies – a beautiful poem Sanaa xxx

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xenia 😀 so good to see you ❤

  22. kanzensakura says:

    I love your thoughts like fireflies. I can hardly wait for summer and the arrival of the fireflies.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  23. kaykuala h says:

    beckons from deep inside the
    subconscious — it’s the only
    way to emerge unconquered.

    The subconscious can be such a potent force if one can garner its powers in the right way!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤

  24. Rall says:

    The inner voice some say is the voice of your guardian angel who watches over you.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rall ❤

  25. Jim says:

    Nice poem, Sanaa. You are right, you can’t trust those stars. They’re far away and not even having life or a spirit. Trust yourself or your spouse our a friend, etc.
    ..

    1. Jim says:

      I meant also to say, THANK YOU for the nice Elliot prompt.
      ..

    2. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 😊 so glad you liked it ❤

  26. I love this, especially “New thoughts bounce around inside my head as fireflies did.” That line keeps echoing in my head as I can see thoughts flitting around until they settle.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, MNL 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤

  27. gillena says:

    Thank you for linling your poem to Monday WRites. Sanaa.

    Much💝love

    1. Sanaa says:

      My pleasure, Gillena ❤

      much love…

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