Robin

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Often we heard her whisper clad in tulle apparel;
“Be sword so as to shield the sliding drops of peril.”
The monks who lone observed chant in Greek and Latin;
Their looks were burning slow leaving behind a pattern.

Her dark and beauteous locks blew seldom in the breeze;
And miles she walked upto were ninety five most at ease.
Her heart as though of robin was beating hard and slow;
The air so thick with grief was due to breathing woe.

Upon her grave she offered flowers of cyan blue
That gave the hint of heaven more odor than hue.


 

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Posted for Poetics @ dVerse Poets Pub

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Comments

  1. Bjorn says:

    I love how you blended the Thistle into this… it works so well into that sad tale…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  2. Heavens. This is just gorgeous.
    Especially:
    “Be sword so as to shield the sliding drops of peril.”
    {especially as “sword” means “pen” to me, always.} 😉

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  3. Misky says:

    A fascinating story. Enjoyed this a lot.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Misky,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Em says:

    That image!!!

    “Be sword so as to shield the sliding drops of peril.”
    “Their looks were burning slow leaving behind a pattern.”

    I love that her hair ISN’T blowing in the breeze. It must be very heavy. Too heavy to be moved about by the wishes of air.

    “Her heart as though of robin was beating hard and slow” … Yes.

    “Upon her grave she offered flowers” … I LOVE that she’s putting flowers on her own grave. That’s how I read it, anyway. Of course, she could also be putting flowers on the grave of a child, mother, sister, etc. But I really like it being her own grave. And the fact that no one else is there to mourn her. Only she is mourning her own death. She was that alone in life.

    This is an insanely good story, Sanaa. I love ghost poetry. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Em,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  5. Ghost, specter, spirit, or mythos, a dark, mysterious tale, brimming with beautiful sadness; very well done. Thanks for stopping by my blog; smile.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
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  6. Kelly Letky says:

    I love this chilling tale, laced with sadness and beauty. And I love that you left us with the lingering scent of heaven…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kelly,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  7. I love that line about the monks chanting Greek and Latin. Such an interesting choice that adds depth to the poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Matthew,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Victoria says:

    There is something of mystery, even mysticism in this for me. Very evocative.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  9. vandana says:

    Heartfelt and the ending line are so touching.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Vandana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  10. Kathy Reed says:

    It’s a mix of early century ruggedness and a newer present day rural setting….
    love the cyan blue flowers and the heavy beating of the robin’s heart…sad journey or life.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kathy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  11. ShirleyB says:

    A wispery, solemn, mystical tale, beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Shirley,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  12. This is beautiful. I especially love the closing stanza that was so unexpected and yet not surprising at all, if that makes any sense. The incongruity of one putting flowers on their own grave is brilliant. Peace, Linda

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Linda,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  13. Raivenne says:

    “The air so thick with grief was due to breathing woe.”

    Beautifully penned, I especially loved this line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Raivenne,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  14. “Her dark and beauteous locks blew seldom in the breeze.” Such an effective line. The limpness of her beautiful hair says so much.

    And the last line is just a perfect closing to this melancholic poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Magaly,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  15. lillian says:

    Upon her grave she offered flowers..this haunting character walks still….hair not blowing. I can feel her spirit moving here…beautifully penned.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Lillian,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  16. Bekkie says:

    Sad, yet colorful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bekkie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead

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