Putting together;
I realized with a heavy heart just how ephemeral
thoughts truly areβ
they avoid the periods of drought as seeds,
all the while
ushering out the old and replacing with new.
I am appalled,
for how is it possible to arrange a bouquet this way?
Putting together
a list, a person, flowers and such
proves to be unfathomable;
when synonyms themselves refuse to come forwardβ
life, my darling is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at once,
putting together positive thoughts,
I attempt and sift the clear with the ones most obscure;
I am figuring out how to make this arrangement so that shadows
fall in correct place.
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Bjorn hosts at dVerse tonight and invites us to try lists that Google gives us. Come join us! π
Thatβs a poetβs job, Sanaa, putting together, although sometimes we need therapists to put us back together! I love the idea of thoughts avoiding periods of drought. I also love:
βlife, my darling, is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at onceβ β
but why five parts?
Thank you so much, Kim π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
Five parts … infancy, childhood, adolescence, middle age, and finally old age. π
Very cleverly put together and your chosen image is just right, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Lisa π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
“Put together” in a most lovely way π
Thank you so much, Dora π so good to see you πβ€οΈ
This is absolutely perfect Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Linda π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
Lovely!
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So clever to use the beginning of put together… which is what poetry is … I will need to try something myself… love how you hid the list so well.
Thank you so much, Bjorn π so glad you enjoyed it πβ€οΈ
(and thank you for the excellent prompt) πΉ
Sanaa, this is absolutely exquisite! Like Kim, I absolutely adored these lines:
“life, my darling is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at once…”
Regarding the five parts, I think you may be referring to the five stages of grief, or you could be hinting at how life is like a play in five act structure; William Shakespeare is the first to come to mind when thinking of this.
But, this is so beautifully entwined with delicacy and raw emotion. Excellent work on this piece.
Thank you so much, Lucy π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
This is googlicious, a real rocking of the prompt. I, of course love the “life is in five parts”, and like Lucy can see it could refer to so much more. I liked “just how ephemeral thoughts truly are.”
Thank you so much, Glenn π so glad you enjoyed it πβ€οΈ
All of this adds up to one well written poem. π
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I love how clever this putting together list is, from fleeting thoughts to making an arrangement so that shadows
fall in correct place.
Thank you so much, Grace π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
an incredibly clever arrangement of the list, your thoughts and exactly what poets do … love it!
Thank you so much, Kate π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
I am figuring out how to make this arrangement
so that shadows fall in the correct place
Unraveling it is easy but putting it together had never been easy. That’s the way things are in life. Great wordcraft Sanaa!
Hank
Definitely π thanks for stopping by, Hank πβ€οΈ
Putting together is what we do best! Well done Sanaa. It is interesting how you put all this in a great poetic fashion!
Thank you so much, Dwight π so glad you enjoyed it πβ€οΈ
I enjoyed this piece, a beautiful bouquet of well picked words! Great use of the prompt!
Thank you so much, Tricia π so good to see you πβ€οΈ
Five is a powerful number. In fact, maybe numbers would make a good prompt at some point!
I love this poem so much. Your last line left me open-mouthed. I literally sat here in silence. It’s just amazing, and it just spoke so directly to me.
Thank you so much, Sarah π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
This poem captured why poetry is therapeutic to me. It is like how we gather our thoughts, make sense of each of them, reflect, and try to crack some light despite the dark.
Beautiful Sanaa, and how I love these lines: life, my darling is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at once
Thank you so much, Rosemarie π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
Beautifully “put together!
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Got a late start today Sanaa. But now Iβm finally able to start reading the work of my fellow poets. You did a great job with this prompt. Well written!
Thank you so much, Rob π so good to see you πβ€οΈ
Thoughts are layered, but we can only express them in sequence. Well done.
Definitely! Thanks for stopping by, Kerfe πβ€οΈ
This is wonderful. I didn’t get anything like those prompts-mine were all books and movies and shopping stuff. I must have really boring internet habits.
Thank you so much, Alexandra π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
Beautifully written and put together!
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Amazing piece you put together! ;-D
I of course, as I read it from my view point almost felt like our poems were kind of about the same thing..
“I attempt and sift the clear with the ones most obscure;
I am figuring out how to make this arrangement so that shadows
fall in correct place.”.
The ending was perfect and also feel as you say: “life, my darling is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at once,”.
Light doesn’t illuminate itself, knife can’t cut itself and a human can’t understand him/herself, let alone my subject, Reality.
Thank you so much, Julian π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
This is such a tantalising phrase: “shadows fall in correct place.” Nicely done.
Thank you so much, Misky π so glad you enjoyed it πβ€οΈ
I attempt to ‘put myself together’ most days and often fail …. your poem was a delight to read and perfectly put together.
Thank you so much, Helen π so good to see you πβ€οΈ
Sanaa: loving this! Putting it all together indeed. These lines
“life, my darling is a poem in five parts,
which no matter how much we desire cannot possibly be
read all at once,” are particularly wonderful to me!
Thank you so much, Lillian π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ