Night on thoughtful plains finds an echo in the art of time

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As the blackness of night comes, I calmly watch myself be erased, the
only evidence being continuous throbbingβ€” dreaming peonies, I hear
them gathering, the world slows and just like that we are plunged into
nothingness.

A lawless region such as this is hard to let go of, soft and damp, yet my
fingers come away dry. Only mouths are we. Who sings the distant heart
which safely exists in the center of all things? I hunger for the light and
other aegean familiarities. When feeling enters into our bodies, it turns
into a fiery substance, a language that coruscates through and through;
and we are left clinging on until the shivery end.

It jumps from me to you, before we even touch, cornsilk conviction that
erupts. A celestial being that resides in the clouds, He’s given us a cup
from which we drink.

 

 

 

 

Photo credits: ‘Apparition of face and fruit dish,’ by Salvador Dali

Join me as I host Prosery Monday at dVerse and ask others towrite inspired by a line from “Heartbeat,” by Rainer Maria Rilke.

Posted for Prosery: Here’s the thing about existing @ dVerse Pub

Comments

  1. Ingrid says:

    I love the dreamlike surrealism of this Sanaa! Or perhaps its more nightmarish?

    ‘ A celestial being that resides in the clouds, He’s given us a cup
    from which we drink.’

    It makes me wonder whether ‘life is but a dream.’ Thought-provoking writing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. This reads like a dream, Sanaa. I like the idea of dreaming peonies and how the prompt line took you to the fiery substance of language.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. This is so beautiful and surrealistic, Sanaa. I can see why you chose the line–it fits the style of your piece. It’s lovely, and reading it I could see all the colors and images unfolding. ❀️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Choosing Dali as your painting here is brilliant, I really feel the dream here… and I wonder if like many dreams it’s a journey lacking both beginning and end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Yayy! Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. msjadeli says:

    What a fantastical tale, to be so close to God, together. Beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. I can’t work out if this is comforting or disturbing, and I love the openness of that confusion. Thanks for a great read

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lonely Recluse πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Gillena Cox says:

    We are all drinking from the cup. Nice image teamed up with your poem. Continues the surreal thoughts of our present day existence

    Happy Monday

    MuchπŸ’šlove

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Gillena πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Happy Monday

      Much love back..

  8. Incredible piece, bang-on in surreal dreamland. Dali always transports us to mysterious landscapes. Your narrator seems to be a Nun to me, married to Jesus, and in love with Jehovah. I liked “cornsilk conviction that erupts”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. So sensually surreal and dreamlike. A wonderful read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marion πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Sanaa, your ending in particular truly blows my mind – it’s stunning.

    It jumps from me to you, before we even touch, cornsilk conviction that erupts. A celestial being that resides in the clouds, He’s given us a cup from which we drink.

    <3
    David

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, David πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. A great poem Sanaa. The art piece fits perfectly…. Seems there may be a lot more going on here than appears on the surface!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ I enjoyed writing this one πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. This story is a dreamscape.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️ ❀️ ❀️

  13. The painting and your words work really well with this quote.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susan πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Mary says:

    This is stunning. I’m dreaming for my peonies. I love the last line. That celestial being pouring out a cup for us to drink.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Beautifully written. I like how surreal this story feels and the way that the line from the poem does not seem out of place.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jenna πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. Perhaps this is what happens to us at night. We are all plucked from daytime by β€œ A celestial being that resides in the clouds, He’s given us a cup
    from which we drink.
    You have given us a lot to think about Sanaa in this beautiful piece β˜ΊοΈπŸ’•

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Christine πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. You have captured both your own voice and the essence of Dali’s painting well Sanaa. He’s one of my favorite artists and your words are rife with surrealism.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Helen says:

    ~~~ until the shivery end. Yes, a few shivers here. Thanks for a great Prosery prompt.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh! Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ I am pleased you enjoyed both the prose and prompt πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. Susan says:

    What a pleasure to read your piece! An out of body experience.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susan πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  20. Everything you write is so beautiful, and even your prose is poetic.

    Love every word.

    I was β€œ left clinging on until the shivery end.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Darius πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  21. A celestial being that resides in the clouds,
    He’s given us a cup from which we drink.

    The good hand of Providence is always there to extend benefits to young lovers who are wrought with throes of innocence and love. Great close Sanaa!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. Corey Rowley says:

    That Rilke fits like a glove with this. Smooth in tone , and wonderfully full of stunning visuals. You have outdone your own prompt. Thanks for the invite!!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Corey πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      (Thank you for coming!) πŸ˜€

  23. Raivenne says:

    Using Dali perfectly complimented this surreal dreamlike penning Sanaa.

    “…and we are left clinging on until the shivery end.” Yes.

    Love this prompt.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Raivenne πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  24. RedCat says:

    This is absolutely breathtaking! πŸ’– I wish it would go on for a whole book. Perfectly chosen artwork to.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helene πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  25. Nina Nazir says:

    Absolutely gorgeous piece of writing. Ethereal and unusual with unexpected turns of phrase: I calmly watch myself be erased / only mouths are / cornsilk conviction <3 Bravo!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Nina πŸ˜€ so glad the prose resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

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