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Wisps of silver grey smoke curl
and dance
their way through the room
as though anxious to escape the mouths
of perpetratorsβ€” is this what it means to abide by?
Sickly sweet,
I attempt to billow in dense clouds of conversation
in the hallway.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Fabian Perez Painting, Pinterest

Lisa is our hostess today at dVerse and the word is “abide.”
Come join us! πŸ’

Posted for Quadrille #117 @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. I love the way you played with the smoke and cloud imagery, Sanaa, starting with wisps and ending with dense clouds.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

    2. Yes, that was skillful!

      1. Sanaa says:

        ❀️❀️❀️

  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I can almost feel the smoke and clouds… there are places where the atmosphere feels too dense… maybe the hallway is better

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. a delight to read and so playful too
    “I attempt to billow in dense clouds of conversation”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Laura πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Ingrid says:

    Really atmospheric, Sanaa – ‘billow in dense clouds of conversation’ is just wonderful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. msjadeli says:

    The smoke comes alive in the room and by the end has dominated those in it. I don’t blame her a bit for getting out of there! Nice creation of atmosphere, Sanaa! I wondered if anyone would write to the unbearable definition of abide πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  6. Very atmospheric. My eyes are burning from the smoke. I think she’s wise to go out to the hallway. πŸ˜€

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. As a lifetime non-smoker, I applaud your message and the clever rocking of the prompt. I, too, used that definition of “abide”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. Delightful description of a gathering of smokers!

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  9. Jane Dougherty says:

    For some reason this reminds me of student parties. Billowing our way through the smoke.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Sarah Connor says:

    I like your semantic field here – wisp, smoke, billow, cloud – works so well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Wonder wisp of a poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Philip πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Gillena Cox says:

    In the hallway , yes for sure, One needs to remove oneself from sickly billows

    Happy Monday Sanaa

    MuchπŸ’œlove

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Gillena πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Happy Monday to you too
      Much love …

  13. Wonderfully smoky imagery, Sanaa. Quarilliffic.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. RedCat says:

    This made an icy – get out of here – thrill run down my back, the image is so vivid! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Red Cat πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Excellent imagery. I could see the smoke in the room!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. Susan says:

    Very evocative. Good writing. You really took me there & I couldn’t wait to leave! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  17. Kerfe says:

    Food for thought. I can almost taste the words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerfe πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. in dense clouds of conversation
    in the hallway.

    Certainly Sanaa, a better location as an alternative!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Hank! πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. Beautiful Sanaa. Smoke does really abide for a long time in a room. It floats like a ghost and penetrates clothes leaving a lasting legacy!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  20. lynn says:

    Strong imagery with subtle use of the word “abide”…well writ!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  21. Lucy says:

    I love, love, love the wordplay in here and the imagery, it’s so vivid, visual. Excellent writing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lucy πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. calmkate says:

    great imagery, feels intense … well provoked!

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  23. Francis Barker says:

    Fantastic — a great story in so few words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Francis πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  24. Ken Gierke says:

    β€œI attempt to billow in dense clouds of conversation” fits perfectly. It completes the picture.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ken πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  25. Paul Cannon says:

    Sanaa, what a potent evocation, right to the bone.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  26. Candy says:

    I like the atmosphere you’ve created.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Candy πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  27. Dora says:

    So finely crafted, it’s almost possible to imagine the persona billowing through “dense clouds of conversation.” Maybe because we’ve all been there! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  28. Jan Beekman says:

    Good for you for responding first to dversepoetry with your Quadrille using “Abide” in the poem. You did it masterfully!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jan πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  29. De Jackson says:

    This is so vivid, Sanaa. You’ve created quite an atmosphere here. Well done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

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