I Loved You First: But Afterwards Your Love

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Poem inspired by the title of Christina Rossetti’s poetic masterpiece, I loved you first: but afterwards your love

Moodily, the crepe crescent appears in the sky
perhaps it seeks validation–
this moment that holds significance as I gaze overhead,
it’s been a while.
I loved you first: but afterwards your love outshone mine,
gifting in return songs of innocence
and experience.

There are days when I picture your face
amid the clouds
knowing well the blossoms shake themselves off the tree
where your scent has touched them.
With the dust of sleep upon my eyes I wake,
gentle tremors reverberate under sheets with subtle anguish;
it defies reason,
greyish-blue reflection of sky with bits of moss press urgently
into my hand
as though urging me to align my breath with yoursβ€”
allow me to touch you, ever so lightly
your lips hold the universe in their frame;
without you,
the world at large is a hieroglyph corridor, incomprehensible.

 

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

For my prompt, where I invite others to write inspired
by the works of Rossetti πŸ’ Come join us!

Posted for Weekly Scribblings @ Poets and Storytellers United

Comments

  1. I like the way you took the essence of Christina Rossetti’s poem and made it your own, Sanaa. I especially love the atmosphere you created in the opening line, and the lines:
    β€˜There are days when I picture your face
    amid the clouds
    knowing well the blossoms shake themselves off the tree
    where your scent has touched them.’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Oh, what a wonderful turn-around of Rossetti’s poem! Brilliantly done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Old Egg says:

    How true this is to accept that love outlasts appearances.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Hazel says:

    So beautifully and wonderfully done!
    “where your scent has touched them…”
    Once I was grappling things them spaces.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hazel πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Jim says:

    Sanaa, for me this fit in with your theme and the painting so very nicely. I will claim your line, “with the dust of sleep upon my eyes I wake,” solo visual and novel idea for me.
    And thank you for this such a fruitful prompt. I may write towards another of his ladies on another day.
    p.s. I did not post my painting as I thought my juvenile readers, family and others, might not be ready for all this, it was the one of the lady holding an apple, one breast revealed.
    I did link the painting’s title but you may need with the header categories to get it in.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it. I agree, some paintings aren’t fit for juvenile readers, family and others to witness πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. Helen says:

    A beautiful poem, the fashion art made me wish I had lived in that era.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Bev Crawford says:

    Beautiful. I love the line “without you, the world at large is a hieroglyph corridor, incomprehensible.” I was there, once upon a long time ago.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. gillena says:

    The image in your last line is so clever, just perfect
    Thanks for dropping by to read mine, Sanaa

    muchπŸ’love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Much love …

  9. I really like how you took her words and made them dance with your own and with your style. Your expansion of the quote says so much of the speaker and subject.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. This is so beautiful…. magnificent writing as only your ink can share

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it! πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. When breaths are aligned with each other, magical things happen!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Most definitely! πŸ˜‰ Thanks for stopping by, MMT πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Lori says:

    One of my favourite Rossetti poems. I like the way that you have built in a bit of the sass I was talking about with the “gentle tremors reverberate under sheets” where there is a sensuality to the longing not just of being in love but in the act of making love. Felt again in the kiss that holds the universe within. It is a love the encompasses the whole of someone. Beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lori πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. this was just beautiful to behold. the accompanying art and the work itself describes this night exactly. windows open, the breeze coming in and the beautiful moon? such beauty!

  14. Sara McNulty says:

    “With the dust of sleep upon my eyes I wake”

    Such a lovely image. Christina Rossetti would have been proud
    to call this poem her own.

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