Green Corn Moon ~ Part Two: The Abduction of Persephone

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Sable or black? Consistency and sometimes misery.
Her lips symptomatic speak of simple joys–
in this surrealistic reality
where the moon mahogany-red shies away from human greed
and psyche;
being lesser nocturnal out of the two,
the clouds, freshly scented, bear witness to abduction.
Hades, haunted by Persephone’s ethereal beauty
offers

a few pomegranate seeds,
just as the rain begins to fall at the end of a hot
and oppressive day;
her mouth despite the coolness outside is dry,
with thoughts
fumbling and every song broken, the inky silhouette of desire
already has her in its arms–
that she is the one he wants is implacable and clear.

There is nothing more deceptive than a detail clearly sketched,
basil, clover, bellis and shadow mourn
as some days
the world moves too quickly and other times slow.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Henrik Aa. Uldalen Painting, Pinterest

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Posted for Open Link Night #273 @ dVerse Poets Pub

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Comments

  1. Lucy says:

    Amazing, AMAZING imagery. I just love this story and how you delve into the imagery of the pomegranate seeds and desire. Such captivating poetry.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lucy πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    This is the most excellent… love how you weaved the myth with the imagery… and that conclusion on time.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Grace says:

    I enjoyed the retelling of her abduction and Hades offering her the pomegranate seeds. The mystic of the moon is in full force.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Misky says:

    Such a brilliant telling of this story. Visually stunning.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Misky πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. you have taken this most dramatic of myths and given it a twist of your own full of the underlying dark passion
    “with thoughts
    fumbling and every song broken, the inky silhouette of desire
    already has her in its arms–”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Laura πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. You had me at “the inky silhouette of desire already had her in its arms.” I like poetics that embrace and attach to legend and fantasy. Your romantic bent prevails, and is well received.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. A marvellous mythological remoulding. Sanaa, both sensual and romantic. I love the way you describe:
    β€˜her mouth despite the coolness outside is dry,
    with thoughts
    fumbling and every song broken, the inky silhouette of desire
    already has her in its arms’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. msjadeli says:

    Sanaa, you wrote this “like a boss.” Such effortless command of your subject.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Othermary says:

    A very erotic piece, Sanaa. I also liked the phrase, “the inky silhouette of desire” and the wisdom of the line, “There is nothing more deceptive than a detail clearly sketched,”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Mary Hood says:

    you spin gold from threads of ink!

    1. Sanaa says:

      That is such high praise! Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Nicely done… great images and feeling throughout.

    love this line…. her mouth despite the coolness outside is dry,
    with thoughts
    fumbling and every song broken,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Ingrid says:

    I like it when myths are re-told to consider the female character’s perspective: you have done this so well here, with such haunting imagery: a pleasure to read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. Oh, I love this so much! You’ve covered the myth with lyricism beautiful imagery. And I liked how you show her temptation–almost a courtship, rather than an abduction.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Fabulous poem on the mythical adventures of Persephone.

    fumbling and every song broken, the inky silhouette of desire
    already has her in its arms–

    Exquisite wordsmithing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  15. lynn says:

    Wow, your poem is powerful storytelling, full of emotion! I like the art you paired with it as well, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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