Ghost Town

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I, gaze towards the cold and desolate moon,
listen to whispers wafted by lingering wind.
Scattering sweet visions lead round a street,
I, couldn’t decide whether feeling or dream.

And though love wore mask of drifting mist,
I, reached out and offered unwavering hand.
My heart is a ghost town, like a rose in sand.

 

 

Photo credits: Pixabay

Posting for “Flash 55 Plus” @ Real Toads

Posted on Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

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Comments

  1. Very atmospheric, and I particularly love the closing simile.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. Beautiful imagery, and that closing line is a stunner. Wow!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry ? so glad you liked it ❤

  3. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I really love the last line of the poem… it ties it up so well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn ? so glad you liked it ❤

  4. Truedessa says:

    My heart is a ghost town, love often leaves us feeling empty, I wonder can a rose bloom in sand. Is it strong enough to withstand the droughts of life?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa ? so glad you liked it ❤

  5. Mary says:

    Whew – this poem blew me away with its imagery. I can picture the heart as a ghost town, a rose in sand. Chilling.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww!❤ Thank you so much, Mary ? so glad you liked it!❤

  6. Very atmospheric, Sanaa,. I especially love the final line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  7. ZQ says:

    Yup, one of your best.
    ZQ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, ZQ 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  8. Very impressive, the image this instills

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Martin 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  9. CC says:

    Ooh, I like the way this speaks to the idea of taking a risk in spite of the odds…putting oneself out there (albeit unwaveringly) even in the face of love masked like a mist. Wonderful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, C.C 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Elizabeth says:

    Your vivid imagery reminds each of us of the chances we all must take while living our lives as fully as possible. I love the photo,

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Elizabeth 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  11. wendy bourke says:

    A haunting and impactful piece … wonderfully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  12. The last line brings the poem to a powerful conclusion.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  13. Sumana Roy says:

    So glad to be back here to read the poem once again. This is so beautiful specially the close.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  14. Jim says:

    The ghost land heart. I would have liked to know how you were feeling and what you were thinking when you wrote that. 🙂
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      (I went for the optional plus, hence the poem)

  15. Brendan says:

    Excellent setting of mood and place in the mist of both–“feeling or dream?”–resolving into a surprising identification one’s own heart as the ghost town. Which suggest that we don’t find ghost towns, they feel us. Excellent ending metaphor for that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Brendan 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. Kerry says:

    What I liked about the poem was that despite the speaker’s uncertainty, she still held out her hand – that speaks of trust and love.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  17. Loved the closing line…all the other lines beautifully leads you to the feelings and mood of that last line!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww!❤️ Thank you so much, Sreeja 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  18. blogoratti says:

    Delightful piece, calming even.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Blogoratti 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  19. gillena says:

    Luv the shift in the end line

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

      much love..

  20. grapeling says:

    I especially like the first line of the second stanza ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Michael 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    What an incredibly powerful (and sad) image: the heart as a ghost town.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, MMT 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  22. Margaret says:

    alone – from the misty night to the ghost town… this poem is about those times we need to be alone to think!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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