Flub

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You
walked in
like summer
serenely sweet
I gazed upon mute
filled with rhapsodic breath
Your eyes they stir, mold and melt
bade me ignore the fears I felt
Oh the heart at length does glow with ache
Reminding me thus of treasured mistake

Form: Etheree

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Posted for Poetics @ dVerse Pub

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Comments

  1. Grace says:

    Reminds me of sweet young love….fearless and ignoring the doubts which will come back to haunt again ~ Thanks for joining in Sanaa ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  2. So many mistakes, I suspect, have fear at their root. Love that you used the etheree!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  3. kanzensakura says:

    Young love, young mistakes. Glad she took a chance!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Toni,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. I love the term “treasured mistake.” So many of them are, with the gift of time.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  5. CC says:

    You have imbued this mistake with such romance! Beautifully written, Sanaa. Thanks for joining in.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello C.C

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  6. Love the physical structure of this poem too which stretches out the sweet yearnings here.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Laura,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  7. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Oh we do make those mistakes… we miss chances and we overstay our welcome… so sad when it trickles out in nothingness

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Bryan Ens says:

    Perhaps falling in love is always a mistake…as we do not chose whom to fall in love with…but what a beautiful mistake it is!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bryan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  9. kaykuala h says:

    That was how it went! Came on strong and walked away just as fast. Very real experience!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  10. Maria says:

    Beautifully done, Sanaa. I love this! ❀

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Maria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  11. Freya says:

    Lovely – both the words/meaning and the form (I do like the Etheree!).

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Freya,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  12. Beautifully romantic, Sanaa! Love this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Walter,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. This poem has sweetness written all over it. Well done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Arcadia,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
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  14. SMiLes.. my mother..
    a published poet
    in print.. and
    paper.. wrote
    a poem named
    Green Eyes about
    my father saying he
    was the most handsome
    man in the world and whomever
    was married to him was the luckiest
    woman of all.. shortly after that he
    popped the question… and didn’t
    say another word more or less
    for three years of marriage..
    hmm.. some days eYes
    are not enough.. he
    left ’cause she wanted
    to raise kids more than
    make money.. hmm.. i guess
    that is why i hate money so
    much i never spent it and got
    rich.. life is ironic when the son
    gets what the father wanted all
    his life.. and the son never gave
    a crap about
    what the Father
    wanted that the
    Son still has now..
    i have a heARt and
    some folks say nice
    eYes too.. but truly
    a heARt is enough for me..
    sMiLes.. i retained the best
    pARt from my MoTher REAL..
    and who kNows perHaps a
    ‘little’
    poeTry
    too.. wITh WInk
    on paper and or forget
    me
    nots.. πŸ˜‰

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  15. Barry D says:

    Ah yes… the flub. Usually, when overcome with the butterflies you describe in your poem, out come the Freudian slips for me (Like the time i asked the cute cashier for a ham poo-nanny instead of panini. Oy!)

    This is such a sweet, sunny depiction of being twitterpated. I love it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Barry,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  16. Ah those sweet memories of youth.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Vivienne,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  17. Ellecee says:

    Hopefully we all have some memories of at least one “treasured mistake” lovely poem, so romantic,,,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Ellecee,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  18. Thotpurge says:

    When heart rules head, a mistake is always on the horizon!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  19. Old Egg says:

    I must agree Sanaa, those romantic mistakes are still treasured years later. I have store of them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Robin,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  20. Sumana Roy says:

    i’m not sure if my comment posted…beautifully written Sanaa….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  21. Jae Rose says:

    Love and mistakes often go hand in hand..hopefully we wouldn’t change too many of those moments though!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  22. Mary says:

    This is a heart-stirring etheree!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  23. Abin Chakraborty says:

    Ah! the thrill of young love. Lovely.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Abin,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  24. The pain of love that is now gone (or seemingly lost) does make us sigh, doesn’t it? Such longing…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Magaly,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  25. Really admire the structure here, and how it holds together, while the lines seem to fall apart. Fitting for the message of this piece.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Matthew,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  26. Sherry Marr says:

    I like the form you chose for this, and especially liked the “treasured mistake”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  27. Susan says:

    I enjoy the contradiction of “treasured mistake.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  28. Truedessa says:

    I think we all make some mistakes when it comes to love. The shape of the poem looks like a thinking cap, so I am pondering your words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  29. Sweet young love beautifully penned Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  30. Myrna says:

    As always, you impress me with your use of form. This one though it’s about lost love, has a particular sweetness to it. Enjoyed it so much.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  31. gillena says:

    Suppose I have to lean to the clichΓ© : better to have loved and lost…

    Happy you dropped by my Sunday Lime today

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  32. Wendy Bourke says:

    rhapsodic breath – sigh – delightful. Another wonderful write, Sanaa,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Wendy,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  33. Elizabeth says:

    Love, especially young love, is blind and sometimes deaf as well,

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Elizabeth,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  34. Luk Lei says:

    Beautiul and Poignant!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Luk Lei,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  35. Yes, some mistakes are sweet – and necessary.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  36. Kerry O'Connor says:

    Some mistakes are to be treasured.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kerry,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  37. This was beautiful. Loved it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jyotsna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  38. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    Walking in like summer takes some skill and finesse, does it not?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello MMT,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

      PS: It sure does πŸ™‚

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