Beneath the silver stars

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The night we walked beneath the stars;
Echo: Ours
Knew not how passed those blissful hours.
Echo: Showers

The stars they shimmered unto the sea;
Echo: See
We trembled as winds caressed our cheeks.
Echo: Speak

If stars for certain govern our fate;
Echo: Faith
Plot to offer – allot your face
Echo: Chase

Upon these stars I wished tonight;
Echo: Might
Till sleep eternal within your sight.
Echo: Cite

As time neared forth towards midnight;
Echo: Right
Exchanged twin looks of sheer delight.
Echo: Quite

The stars above aligned to commemorate your birth;
Echo: Mirth
Depths of shimmering sea strive to match your worth.
Echo: Dearth

 

 

Photo Credits: www.worldfortravel.com

Form: Echo Verse

Posted on ‘Poetics’ @ dVerse Poets Pub

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and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. Victoria says:

    This lends itself so well to the echo format and your work with rhyme is so well done, too. I’m not sure there are too many things that equal a walk beneath the stars for a romantic relationship.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  2. Bjorn says:

    Oh I love the thought of speaking with the Stars – I’m sure this is how they would answer back.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

    2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

      Love the revisit

      1. Sanaa says:

        Thanks for stopping by, Bjorn 🙂

  3. Mary says:

    I like the kind of magical and mystical quality of this poem, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  4. Grace says:

    Would love to take that walk and make a wish too ~

    Admiring the echo form Sanaa ~ Thanks for sharing ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  5. L. Moon says:

    So dreamy – I think I hear the stars echoing your words 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

      PS: Missed you!

  6. ghostmmnc says:

    Beautiful! I love the echo parts!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Ghostmmnc,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  7. kanzensakura says:

    What a wonderful echo poem! The rhyme has a good touch to it and I like the thought of talking to the stars while walking by the ocean. I often talk to them in the forest. I wonder if they sound the same when they answer back?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Toni,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  8. Candy says:

    What a beautiful echo poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Candy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  9. Prajakta says:

    Wonderful form of poetry here. Also, the photograph – the place is near the top of my travel list. Breathtaking!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Prajakta,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  10. MarinaSofia says:

    Great use of echo poetry – I love the fact that you use slant rhymes, very much a Chinese whispers effect.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Marina,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  11. Sumana Roy says:

    How very romantic and magical…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  12. Georgina says:

    This is lovely and I like the echoes. Have also downloaded your poetry and look forward to reading as am not always near an Internet connection now!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Georgina,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

      PS: Hope you like the book 😀

  13. Conversing with the stars! Perfect!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Carol,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  14. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    Just yesterday I read an article about these glowing organisms in waters in only a few places on the earth. I think your photo shows these. I loved your poem, Sanaa, and how the stars are reflected in your romantic offering.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  15. This becomes a starlit conversation. Such a gorgeous echo of light.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  16. Marie says:

    I enjoyed your echo format.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Marie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  17. This is beautiful! I love the echo words you chose and the subtle message of faith in something greater than the stars themselves. And the picture is stunning and goes so well with the poem. Peace, Linda

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Linda,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  18. Bryan Ens says:

    The echoes are a nice touch, especially with that lovely picture of stars “echoed” in the waves 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bryan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  19. Kathy Reed says:

    A perfect photo to go with a perfect poem, and the first “wish” I’ve read so far today…the first and last stanzas stand out to me..things I would like to have written 😉 Nice to read this out loud with the echo effect.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kathy,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  20. A fascinating form, just right for the romantic theme.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Vivienne,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  21. Thotpurge says:

    Every time I see this form I think it is best suited to be read aloud by two people!! Like a song!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww!❤️ Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  22. HA says:

    The echoes create such a dynamic and uplifting scenario in this rendezvous beneath the silver stars. How beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anmol 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  23. gillena says:

    “The stars above aligned to commemorate your birth;”

    To think we are thus important and celebrated, makes reading your poem all the more worthwhile

    Happy Tuesday Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

      Happy Tuesday to you too

      much love..

  24. Fireblossom says:

    Very interesting and satisfying structure to this poem, and a nice feel. Love the picture as well. (By the way, the link worked fine for me.)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Shay 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      (thanks for letting me know)

  25. Fascinating structure; very effective.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, J 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  26. I imagine this funny to read in an echo chamber. Magical.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  27. Marian says:

    Such a cool format, kind of call and response, I really like it. It works! Wonderful. xo

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww!❤️ Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

      xoxo

  28. A magical image and a magical echo poem, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. Wonderfully done. Don’t the stars answer, when we turn our imagination toward them?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Martin 🙂

  30. Fascinating, the way these echoes both comment upon and deepen what is said. A beautiful poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  31. Echo is hard to do so well! Stars in your eyes Sanaa – a real romantic

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  32. Kerry says:

    These echo poems are really something special. It’s a style we do not see very often.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww!❤️ Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

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