As darkness surrenders

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The darkest hour of dawn and its hum, November clouds drifting
ever so slowly despite everything that surrounds; can I wake and
keep my dreams with me?

As darkness surrenders, every colour, every shade changes from
sable to a vibrancy; there are days when I wonder about the way
the universe runs, would we be the same if limbs impassioned
lost their magic, if they felt otherwise? The lake-side air is pungent
with the fragrance of jasmine, its surface as smooth as glass –
radiating ripples which, if one is lucky, are caught by twilight; can
you hear the gulls overhead?

What I can do, you can do, you don’t see it yet but believe me when
I say it’s true; we need only have conviction, the heart understands
truths dark, unintelligible—there is nothing behind the wall except
a space where the wind whistles.

 

 

 

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Posted for Prosery Monday @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. I’ve often thought that myself, Sanaa, ‘can I wake and keep my dreams with me?’ But then, if I did, I might miss the dawn, when ‘every colour, every shade changes from sable to a vibrancy’ – so beautiful. I love the appeal to the senses in this piece, for example the lake-side air ‘pungent with the fragrance of jasmine’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Love the thought of bringing the dreams along into daylight… maybe we can if just do our best. It does help with jasmine and a wonderful lake.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  3. msjadeli says:

    Good visual on the sable of the darkest part of dawn shifting to vibrant color.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  4. Lovely, Sanaa. 💙 So full of sensory impressions.This definitely was “a little dash of sunny.”
    Last night I was dreaming poetry, and I knew I was dreaming and trying to remember the poems. 😀

    1. Sanaa says:

      I absolutely relate! Thank you so much, Merril 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  5. Lillian says:

    This is absolutely beautiful! The scene you set is wondrous. As we slip into darkness, would that all our dreams be so beautifully wrought.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  6. Wow, a delicious piece of pose, that enchants as it rocks the prompt. Lately I’ve been dreaming that I’m back in the Navy, gone to prison, or back at the office. I get a glimpse of them as I awaken, glad to shake them off and greet the new day.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  7. What lovely thoughts and words you have strung together like the finest pearls.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  8. RedCat says:

    This is absolutely lovely Saana. Especially the ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  9. I could close my eyes and smell the jasmine, open them and see the mirror surface of the lake. Thanks for taking me into your dreams!b

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  10. Gillena Cox says:

    Dreams are like that perfect deserters. They remain behind sometimes to cath up with us once more

    Happy Monday Sanaa

    Much💗love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Gillena 💄❤️

      Much love …

  11. Eugenia says:

    Truly beautiful, Sanaa, and I love the ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eugenia 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  12. robtkistner says:

    This is beautiful, elegant, and huge in scale. Really liked this piece Sanaa. You took me from a dream into the universe.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  13. Debi Swim says:

    Lovely. But, I think I want my dreams to stay in the night so that I continue to look forward to the dreams that come.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  14. Mary Hood says:

    Lovely images in this prose. I love the thought of darkness surrendering.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  15. peter says:

    A lovely sensual piece about those liminal places – the lake-shore – and times – dusk, dawn – and the need for courage when things are uncertain. ‘Sable’ is a wonderful adjective for night. Delicious Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Peter 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  16. Kerfe says:

    The whole thing floats, suspended in timelessness. Lovely.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  17. Ingrid says:

    Fantastic response, Sanaa!
    ‘As darkness surrenders, every colour, every shade changes from
    sable to a vibrancy’
    You have really brought the night alive with beauty. There are ways to find happiness in darkness.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  18. Your words are mystical and graceful, like your image, I did have a sense of floating through in a dream state. Lovely piece!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tricia 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  19. Jane Dougherty says:

    This is a lovely prose poem hanging between sleeping and waking when the dreams still linger.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  20. Misky says:

    Sensual and fanciful. Oh to think what those dreams are up to!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Misky 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  21. Sara McNulty says:

    There are some dreams it would be lovely to take along with you.
    The sensual ones can’t miss. Love this beauty, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

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