Your absence
stings soft and pulls nearer to the heart
holding on to sessions of sweet and silent thoughts
Your absence
stings soft as though buds of crimson fire
stirring up hopes and dreams of endless desire
Your absence
stings soft and floods the heart like rain
surges through the blood and pulses through the vein
Your absence
stings soft and rouses love and passion
urging nature to bend her rules to perceive fervid pattern
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70 Responses
Like a stinging nettle – this form of absence always hard to endure.
Beauty penned in your ink, Sanaa.
Hope your days are filled with sunshine.
Thank you so much, Leslie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Really touching lines.
Thank you so much, Rudra 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
I couldn’t help but think of ‘absence makes the heart grow fonder’ – in this instance it is far past fond and well on the way to passionate 🙂
Thank you so much, Jae 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Lucky are those whom absence stings soft….. instead of with unbearable venom as its want.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❤️
Love always attempts to bend the rules and what joy it is when you are successful!
Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so good to see you ❤️
absence in such exquisite imagery Sanaa…tender yet passionate just like ‘buds of crimson fire’ as you say….
Thank you so much, Sumana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
You’ve written a poem the reader can feel, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I feel that soft absence when away from loved ones….such beautiful feelings stirred in this absence as it stirs such passion as do your lines of poetry!
Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Vivid imagery!
Thank you so much, Brother Ollie 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Oh, oh, oh!
This imagery is unforgettable.
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Susan 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
This is how the absence of a beloved makes one feel. Well said, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Sherry 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Beautiful….there’s something satin about the tune…/ words../ sound of the voice in this poem! I just love this, Sanaa! ❤️
Thank you so much, Panchali 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I concur. There is a satin feel about this poem…smooth and soft.
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Does absence make the heart stronger or just create a giant void? You create a picture for the reader to interpret any way they choose 🙂
Thank you so much, Truedessa 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Beautiful as always. I like the nod to Shakespeare!
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so good to see you ❤️
delicate and alluring, with a “sting: of sadness
much love..
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I like the Shakespeare reference 🙂
Thank you so much, C.C 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your poem stings soft at the heart Sanaa. A lovely poem!
Thank you so much, Bekkie 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Intense longing in this, accentuated by the way you use repetition.
Thank you so much, Victoria 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Absence stings soft… I liked that image, Sanaa. Well-written!
Thank you so much, Nicholas 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
deep seated emotions of heart, how it misses its beloved 🙁
Thank you so much, Vandana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
The true absence of one we truly love is heartbreaking. The absence of an imagined lover is even more sad but in a different way. Absence repeated in your poem says much.
Thank you so much, Toni 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
The repetition here really worked wonders and the feel of the piece was curiously romantic and haunting at the same time. It is true it does sting softly.
Thank you so much, Corey 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
An absence that keeps the beloved ever-present. Wonderfully done.
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Such absence… its weight a millstone… the longing burning like fire.
Love the use of repetition.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Smokin’! Especially the last three lines, and the way the rest of the poem gets us there. The repetition works wonderfully.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love the refrain….it allows you paint a new picture with each stanza.
Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
That rain waters a bitter garden. Poignant write
Thank you so much, Eric 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
What do they day, “absence makes the heart grow fonder?” I enjoyed reading your vignettes. For me, I can’t sleep until not-so wee hours come. We haven’t had many absenses in our 45 years. My other marriage separation was hard as I was caught by surprise.
Thank you for hosting Tuesday Platform again this week. I Googled your city, it looks marvelous.
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Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your absence
stings soft and rouses love and passion
urging nature to bend her rules to perceive fervid pattern
Absence can create so much longings in a young heart!
Hank
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤️
I’ve only just got around to reading this morning as I only finished my exam marking yesterday. So it’s a treat to be reading your poem this morning, Sanaa, before my day starts. What a stunning way to describe absence: ‘stings soft and pulls nearer to the heart’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Love when an abstract word or feeling becomes so real and tangible in a poem. I enjoyed this soft sting–thank you!
Thank you so much, Romana 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
From the days of Shakespeare’s sweet silent thought to the present, the absence of a loved one will always sting.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Perhaps you speak of the “longing,” that will always be? Is it that special someone, or any one at all that will fill the emptiness?
It is that special someone 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Annell ❤️
The thought and repetition of “sting soft” is really interesting in this.
Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️