Absence

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Your absence
stings soft and pulls nearer to the heart
holding on to sessions of sweet and silent thoughts
Your absence
stings soft as though buds of crimson fire
stirring up hopes and dreams of endless desire
Your absence
stings soft and floods the heart like rain
surges through the blood and pulses through the vein
Your absence
stings soft and rouses love and passion
urging nature to bend her rules to perceive fervid pattern

 

 

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Posted on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. L. Moon says:

    Like a stinging nettle – this form of absence always hard to endure.
    Beauty penned in your ink, Sanaa.
    Hope your days are filled with sunshine.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Leslie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. rudraprayaga says:

    Really touching lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rudra 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  3. Jae Rose says:

    I couldn’t help but think of ‘absence makes the heart grow fonder’ – in this instance it is far past fond and well on the way to passionate 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. Thotpurge says:

    Lucky are those whom absence stings soft….. instead of with unbearable venom as its want.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❤️

  5. Old Egg says:

    Love always attempts to bend the rules and what joy it is when you are successful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  6. Sumana Roy says:

    absence in such exquisite imagery Sanaa…tender yet passionate just like ‘buds of crimson fire’ as you say….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. Mary says:

    You’ve written a poem the reader can feel, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. I feel that soft absence when away from loved ones….such beautiful feelings stirred in this absence as it stirs such passion as do your lines of poetry!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  9. Vivid imagery!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Brother Ollie 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  10. Susan says:

    Oh, oh, oh!
    This imagery is unforgettable.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Susan 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  11. Sherry Marr says:

    This is how the absence of a beloved makes one feel. Well said, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  12. panchali says:

    Beautiful….there’s something satin about the tune…/ words../ sound of the voice in this poem! I just love this, Sanaa! ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Panchali 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

    2. Rall says:

      I concur. There is a satin feel about this poem…smooth and soft.

      1. Sanaa says:

        ❤️❤️❤️

  13. Truedessa says:

    Does absence make the heart stronger or just create a giant void? You create a picture for the reader to interpret any way they choose 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  14. Beautiful as always. I like the nod to Shakespeare!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  15. gillena says:

    delicate and alluring, with a “sting: of sadness

    much love..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. CC says:

    I like the Shakespeare reference 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, C.C 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  17. Bekkie says:

    Your poem stings soft at the heart Sanaa. A lovely poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bekkie 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  18. Intense longing in this, accentuated by the way you use repetition.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Victoria 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  19. Nicholas V. says:

    Absence stings soft… I liked that image, Sanaa. Well-written!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Nicholas 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  20. Vandana says:

    deep seated emotions of heart, how it misses its beloved 🙁

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vandana 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. kanzensakura says:

    The true absence of one we truly love is heartbreaking. The absence of an imagined lover is even more sad but in a different way. Absence repeated in your poem says much.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  22. Herotomost says:

    The repetition here really worked wonders and the feel of the piece was curiously romantic and haunting at the same time. It is true it does sting softly.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Corey 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. An absence that keeps the beloved ever-present. Wonderfully done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  24. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Such absence… its weight a millstone… the longing burning like fire.

    Love the use of repetition.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  25. Smokin’! Especially the last three lines, and the way the rest of the poem gets us there. The repetition works wonderfully.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  26. Vivian Zems says:

    I love the refrain….it allows you paint a new picture with each stanza.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  27. Eric says:

    That rain waters a bitter garden. Poignant write

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  28. Jim says:

    What do they day, “absence makes the heart grow fonder?” I enjoyed reading your vignettes. For me, I can’t sleep until not-so wee hours come. We haven’t had many absenses in our 45 years. My other marriage separation was hard as I was caught by surprise.
    Thank you for hosting Tuesday Platform again this week. I Googled your city, it looks marvelous.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. kaykuala says:

    Your absence
    stings soft and rouses love and passion
    urging nature to bend her rules to perceive fervid pattern

    Absence can create so much longings in a young heart!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤️

  30. I’ve only just got around to reading this morning as I only finished my exam marking yesterday. So it’s a treat to be reading your poem this morning, Sanaa, before my day starts. What a stunning way to describe absence: ‘stings soft and pulls nearer to the heart’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  31. Romana Iorga says:

    Love when an abstract word or feeling becomes so real and tangible in a poem. I enjoyed this soft sting–thank you!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Romana 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  32. Kerry O'Connor says:

    From the days of Shakespeare’s sweet silent thought to the present, the absence of a loved one will always sting.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  33. Perhaps you speak of the “longing,” that will always be? Is it that special someone, or any one at all that will fill the emptiness?

    1. Sanaa says:

      It is that special someone 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Annell ❤️

  34. Marian says:

    The thought and repetition of “sting soft” is really interesting in this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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