Within This Heart Of Mine

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I sought to kiss
but felt this wrong
now miss those times,
can we climb out
lest rhyme holds grudge-
I wipe smudge of
doubt, nudge you too.

I had a dream
moon’s first gleam spreads
yet seemed as dim.
Roses grim, wine
and whim of fate-
set me straight, I
feel weight of world.

What good is sleep
light or deep, love
come sweep me away-
cold and grey skies,
I stay and write
poems bright through
late night (till day).

 

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Form: Than BaukΒ 

Posted on ‘Sunday Mini-Challenge’ @ Real Toads

& Posted on the “Poetry Pantry” @ Poets UnitedΒ 

& Posted on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

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50 thoughts on “Within This Heart Of Mine

  1. Marian says:

    Sanaa. This is just gorgeous! Wow, wow. This part should maybe be a tattoo or something:
    What good is sleep
    light or deep, love
    come sweep me away-
    And I just love the parenthetical at the end. Swoon!❀️

    • Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❀️ Thank you so much, Marian πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it!❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  2. Kim M. Russell says:

    Beautifully and expertly done, Sanaa! I struggled with this form. I especially love the links between ‘I sought to kiss’ and ‘I wipe smudge of / doubt’; and ‘I had a dream / moon’s first gleam spreads’ and ‘I stay and write / poems bright through / late night (till day)’.

  3. Mary says:

    Oh yes, sometimes writing poetry can take away from time to sleep…..but the results can be worth it indeed! Enjoyed your reflections.

  4. Susan says:

    Wow! A delicate balance in this form and echoed in the aloneness and creativity. O, sad. The narrator should at least have the kiss! Have a happy birthday, Sanaa,

  5. Jim says:

    I liked the word play this lent to. Grudge seemed best for me. I think poets enjoy the challenge of writing. I do but won’t call myself as a poet even though I enjoy the writing.
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