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You were promise, you were prophecy
oh eyes so just they pierced my winter.
You led your way into my aching heart
oh words, as warm as endless summer. 

Through days of sorrow, days of mirth
You were sun and storm curved in one.

 

Photo credits: Jolygram

Posted for ‘Quadrille 34’ @ dVerse Pub

and on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. De Jackson says:

    “eyes so just they pierced my winter”

    This is just gorgeous, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  2. Frank says:

    I liked the contrast of sun and storm being realized in one person.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  3. Walter Marks says:

    words, as warm as endless summer. Just love that, sounds so warm and loving.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Walter 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. Wow. Such vivid imagery with the use of seasons. Beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Arcadia 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  5. thotpurge says:

    Sun and storm in one.. yes most relationships can be a mix of both!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Rajani 🙂

  6. Nosaint Augustine says:

    Very pretty. Your poem has a timeless quality.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Augustine 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  7. Sumana Roy says:

    Poetry is the best love one can have. “oh words, as warm as endless summer.” Yes, they are that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww!❤️ Thank you so much, Sumana 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  8. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Wonderful when words can do this..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  9. I love the final line, Sanaa:
    ‘You were sun and storm curved in one’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  10. Sun and storm curved in one. That verb is perfect! Some melancholy in this poem, and loss. Beautiful, Sanaa

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  11. Grace says:

    I specially love this line: You were sun and storm curved in one.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  12. Misky says:

    Completely beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Misky 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Colin Lee says:

    Oh the bittersweetness of love. That soothing rhythm feels like gentle caresses of a sleepless lover to me.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colin 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  14. Great lines…wonderful imagery! !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sreeja 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  15. Lillian says:

    You were sun and storm curved in one.
    Yes — unconditional love weathers storms and basks in sun.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. I really love the contrast between joy and sorrow, calm and storm, love and loss… dancing through the lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  17. Imelda says:

    “Words, as warm as endless summers”

    That phrase is so comforting.
    ?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Imelda 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. Victoria says:

    This is truly wondrous. Love the last line and your use of storm.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Victoria 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  19. Kerry O'Connor says:

    I love it, Sanaa. A new favourite!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  20. I love the image of eyes piercing winter. That makes me feel all warm and summery. Also, I like how you ended with sun and storm rolled into one – a nice metaphor for the complexity of relationships.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Victoria 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Piercing your winter, words as warm as summer make for a poetic winner.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  22. Absolutely wonder-filled expression.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Martin 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. debi says:

    You were sun and storm curved in one….. Excellent

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  24. Jim says:

    Sounds like a scoundrel to me, Sanaa. I hope he leaves.
    .. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  25. Janice says:

    A poem that becomes more lyrical the more I read it … so human with joy and hints of pain.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Janice 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  26. Kunal says:

    Wow!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kunal 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

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