Word count, syllables, symbolism
perhaps something related to sea.
Line breaks feeling as though one
taking a walk along the sidelines.
Breathe its not just about similes,
pour your heart into your sonnet.
Every inch of me yearned for love
that bursts unto sky as fireworks!
This I give to you, a poem written
from the depths of my chaste soul.
Yet drops of rain and burning ash
speak of desires that were untold.
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Excellent! π
Thank you so much, Rosemary π so good to see you β€οΈ
And such exquisite detail you’ve woven here!
Thank you so much, Barry π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Superb writing!
Thank you so much, Khaya π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Sanaa, Luv the dual passion of writer /lover in your second stanza
Much love…
I enjoyed every word and emotion of this
Thank you so much, Debi π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Thank you so much, Gillena π so glad you enjoyed it β€οΈ
Ah, the final lines really clinch it for me.. So much more is left unsaid between the lines!
Awwwww!β€οΈ Thank you so much, Kerry π so glad you liked it!β€οΈ
(and thank you for the challenging prompt)
“Yet drops of rain and burning ash / speak of desires that were untold.” Great last lines of yearning, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Sarah π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Those untold desires do tend to sneak in, don’t they?
Most definitely β€οΈ thanks for stopping by, Magaly π
Yes it’s what’s between the lines that counts.
Definitely β€οΈ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn π
I love the idea of talking a walk instead of taking a walk — especially when talking to myself. π
The last stanza is mighty powerful, girl.
Thank you so much, Rene π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
Soulful, deeply stirring and beautiful! Such wonderful writing… I could feel as though this could be a song, such beautiful lyrics ! Just feels very moving and strong ! Love this!
Victoria
Thank you so much, Victoria π so glad you liked it β€οΈ
I’m imagining myself walking the beach as I read. Is there something left untold?
Tonsβ€οΈ thanks for stopping by, Colleen π
I wasn’t sure if you meant “Talking a walk on the sidelines.” But if that is what you meant, it is brilliant!!!
It was!β€οΈ Thanks for stopping by, Annell π
Thank you for linking this to Monday WRites Sanaa
much love…
My pleasure, Gillena β€
Much love…
Love the last stanza, Sanaa. Most enjoyable read.
Thank you so much, Julian π so glad you liked it β€οΈ