Akin to unrehearsed play
come and loosen with bare hands
as tide wears dove-colored sands
oust inhibitions astray.
I circle in mute phrases
feel doubts and unease burning
is there chance – our returning
I pine through empty stages.
With lips that deny distance
come whisper to restless soul
as ardor claims full control
in lyrical persistence.
Love, I have done this before
mourning as paired souls are threshed
on warm night in Budapest
stars strewn across grassy floor.
I yearn for ache – powerful
one that taints heavens above
recounting sad tale of love
through valleys sweet – flowerful
Photo credits: Pinterest
Form: Tanaga
Posted on Sunday Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads
& Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
beautiful,sensual with words that give the sense of feeling… enjoyed it very much
Thank you so much, Robert 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
This Saturday has few offerings yet I’m not used to being the first. Lol! I loved the line, “stars strewn across grassy floor.” I see them glittering there at my feet.
Love is so overpowering in it’s “all.” You captured that “ache” well, Sanaa! I enjoyed this prompt. Hugs!
Thank you so much, Bekkie 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
“With lips that deny distance” I totally love what this line implies, what it says about words and communication in general. Just yummy.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Such a lyrical tale of longing … do we ever appreciate love as much as afterwards?
Thank you so much, Bjorn 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
With lips that deny distance
come whisper to restless soul
as ardor claims full control
in lyrical persistence.
Aptly describing the tenacity of love, Sanaa! Lovely shot from a young heart!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Such a passionate piece. I especially adore the second to last tanaga but all work together very well.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
circle in mute phrases.. like that!!!!
Thank you so much, Rajani 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
That ache for love is quite obsessive isn’t it? Unless you have felt that yearning that hurt you don’t realise what love is all about. How well you have captured this Sanaa. I say this as an oldie with memories still niggling at me so many, many years after.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Robin ❤️
Wow, Sanaa, you went the distance with this one! I could only manage one Tanaga but you’ve built a whole poem out of them. I especially love:
‘I circle in mute phrases
feel doubts and unease burning
is there chance – our returning
I pine through empty stages’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
A beautifully romantic poem
Thank you so much, Jae 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
You have really captured the yearning, the ache, the depth of what love is. I like the word ‘flowerful’ at the conclusion!
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
How often we lament about lost loves…beautiful!
‘I circle in mute phrases
feel doubts and unease burning
is there chance – our returning
I pine through empty stages.’
Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Long distance love affairs can be pretty tough. But if lovers are determined enough, sometimes things work out.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rommy ❤️
That yearning and ache…so powerfully captured by you.
Indeed, love has the power to make heavens answer.
Thank you so much, Neeraj 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Like the honesty in this Sanaa – in essence -the sweetness on going yearnings that for a brave, ambitious and romantic heart are always worth what they cost us…
Thank you so much, Scott 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Ah, wonderful, Sanaa! Overachiever! 🙂
I love how you ended this sultry poem on the word “flowerful,” and in a strictly rhyming verse nonetheless. Really good.
Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt)
This is lovely, filled with so many profound phrases – I can’t pick a favorite! Lovely write.
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Sherri 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
a sensual poem, Sanaa.
loved the rhyming scheme, the cadence flows along like a dance. a real delight to read. 🙂
Thank you so much, Cheong 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
A did enjoy reading your piece of well crafted writing with its continuous syllable count of seven per line along with the continuity or rhyme. You always please my mind with your poetry.
Thank you so much, Julian 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Such romance, I love the reference to a warm night in Budapest, “stars strewn across grassy floor.” I love the dove-colored sand” also.
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Yes, “through valleys sweet.” Love this.
Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Passionate and sensuous, Luv how you meld the tangible and intangible in this one.
Thanks for dropping by my Sunday Standard today Sanaa
much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
A spell. I love the power of the last word: flowerful.
Thank you so much, Colleen 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
I love this form and the rhymes – one can feel the passion, but also there is a sense of loss – perhaps, time and distance. My favorite is verse 3, but I do love the image of the stars at the end.
Thank you so much, Truedessa 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Goodness, this is beautiful, and you managed a form so exquisitely that I struggled so with.
Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Gorgeously sensual. You rocked this form! And how I love your rhyming, particularly “flowerful”.
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Beautiful thoughts, Sanaa. I once felt “we” were there,and had the rug pulled out from under. This Second one has lasted 45 years, a good sign.
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Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Very clever – such passion expressed in a structured rhyming scheme – NOT easy to do but you certainly succeeded!
Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love your title and the whole poem!
Thank you so much, Annell 😀 so good to see you ❤️