Unintended

Spread the love

My love for you is a rose almond. Luscious and creamier than milk, itself.
Sliding into sleep, I search for you. Am I deluded? Do you feel the same?

A luscious rose almond. I search for love that is creamier than milk, itself.
Sleep, itself is deluded. Do you feel I am sliding? The same? And into you?

Do you feel sleep is a search for you, itself? And love a rose almond?
Am I sliding into the same? Luscious and creamier than milk, do you
feel deluded?

Sliding as a rose almond into luscious milk, am I creamier than love, itself?
I am deluded. And I search for you. My love, do you feel the same? Sleep.

My love is sliding into sleep. I search for rose almonds and creamier milk.
I am the same. Love, itself is deluded. Luscious than you? You feel?

Deluded, I am sliding into rose almond sleep. And you feel the same.
You search for love, luscious and creamier than milk, itself. My love.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Kim invites us to write inspired byΒ  Wendy Cope’s poem “The Uncertainty of the Poet.”

Posted for Weekend Mini-Challenge: The Uncertainty of the Poet @ Real Toads

Posted on Pantry of Poetry and Prose @
Poets United

42 thoughts on “Unintended

  1. Magaly Guerrero says:

    I was so glad to see Marian’s “Awwwww” because I, too, did a ridiculous amount of cooing while reading this one. This is lovely, Sanaa, especially the ending. Also, all those questions–their tone, their hint of happy madness–sings of love that is fresh and deep.

  2. Stranded Tree says:

    I describe your writing as “gentle sensuality” and have shared your poems as the way to write love poems the right way (because I can’t do it well.) Thank you again for another “sighing” moment.

  3. Kerry says:

    You went the extra mile with this prompt, Sanaa. I admire your success with so many words and phrases to repeat to describe such a fresh and creamy passion!

    • Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it. You inspired me to attempt the form! 🌰❀️

  4. Kim M. Russell says:

    I enjoyed the complexity and romantic beauty of your love poem, Sanaa, and the way you have played with so many permutations, almost like a prayer, a fantastic feat! I can smell the scent and taste the sweetness of rose almond throughout. I especially love ’I search for love that is creamier than milk, itself’ and β€˜Sliding as a rose almond into luscious milk, am I creamier than love, itself?’

    • Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it. I wouldn’t have missed your last prompt at Toads for the world! 🌰❀️

  5. Jim says:

    Hey Sanaa, you took a hard route with so many words. I’m especially amazed how you fit the right sounding words in, both in the start and in your progression. My best like is, “Am I deluded? Do you feel the same?”
    ..

  6. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I really love the progression of this… just like when you fall in love with all the questions to the fulfillment and trust in the end.

  7. Barry says:

    Everything about this is amazing. Moving from uncertainty to assurance within a framework that should be unwieldy, yet in your hands, is mastered as an extension of yourself.

    I get lost in your words, and that’s just fine with me. πŸ™‚

  8. Khaya Ronkainen says:

    Mmm…sensual! Your piece oozes delicious things; sweet nothings and knowing questions. Beautiful write Sanaa, as always.

    p.s. Each time I read one of your poems, I keep checking if there’s an announcement for a volume of your verses. No pressure. πŸ˜€ But it’s one of the poetry books, I’m looking forward to hold in my hands and read one day. <3

    • Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you 🌰❀️

      ( I believe there is a little time before the volume of verses comes out. I really appreciate your fervour and support)

  9. gillena says:

    Luv the questions, the circular motion of your words id like a stirring of milk so gently so sensuous.

    Thank you for dropping by my sumie Sunday today Sanaa

    MuchπŸ‘ΌπŸ½love

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *