The Ritual

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The night seemed to sound only of water
thought her wearied soul and mind,
inclined towards the sky that had darkened
to a faint violet–inviolate as though free
from desecration and blind rage.

Age, she thought was like climbing a summit,
the further we climb the clearer our views get.
Forget the one who hurt you yesterday
because lives fade like a passing shadow.

Espresso and a half-written page peered
 as a tear blossomed in her eye.
 Why was her heart bent upon following a
 ritual where each stretch of the imagination
 was tortured. Orchard, which had once
 belonged to my mother was mine--
Dine.

 

Photo credits: Pixabay

Form: Chained Rhyme

Posted on Sunday Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

& Posted on the ‘Poetry Pantry’ @ Poets United

60 thoughts on “The Ritual

  1. Kim M. Russell says:

    I like the play on words in:
    ‘…a faint violetโ€“inviolate as though free
    from desecration and blind rage’
    and the idea that age is like climbing a summit:
    ‘the further we climb the clearer our views get’.

  2. Marian says:

    Whoosh! I like this, too. The rhymes and lines are so subtle that I had to work to find the chain, a good thing! I particularly love shadow/espresso and tortured orchard! ๐Ÿ™‚ And the second paragraph, I can relate. Really nice, Sanaa.

  3. Mary says:

    ” Age, she thought was like climbing a summit,
    the further we climb the clearer our views get.
    Forget the one who hurt you yesterday
    because lives fade like a passing shadow. ”

    Those are among my favorite words of yours written, Sanaa.
    I think you have expressed this concept so very well. And we do
    have to forget those who hurt us in the past….and move on!

  4. Magaly Guerrero says:

    The first stanza is lovely in its ambiguity and richness, especially the ending lines. The implications of the “as if”, which does’t tell us directly that the sky has been desecrated, but still leaves us thinking maybe… but hopefully, not.

  5. J Cosmo Newbery says:

    “Age, she thought was like climbing a summit” – I think I’m picking up speed down the other side. ๐Ÿ™

  6. Chris Evans says:

    “Forget the one who hurt you yesterday” ..this is so wonderfully wise ๐Ÿ˜Š Often it is that our entire life is wasted brooding upon past relationships and woes.

  7. gillena says:

    “Age, she thought was like climbing a summit,
    the further we climb the clearer our views get.”

    If so, then i’m ready to climb even higher

    much love…

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