Sometimes aloud in perfect solitude, with me, my thoughts

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Like one drawn to cigarettes;
sauntering down lane,
am I to kiss, deepening
eyes -so full– of rain.
This winter of mud,
who knows what the hours will bring?
I’ve slept amongst buds.

 

Lilacs false know not hue, love
I will say it loud;
sideways in pall of black smoke
in this lonely crowd.
Of all the seasons,
Spring pushes forth at first chance;
look for life’s meaning.

 

 

 

Photo credits: “Priceless,” limited edition artwork by Richard Blunt, Pinterest.

Grace hosts at dVerse and invites us to try a new poetic form
known as
“Seguidilla.” Come join us! πŸ’

Posted for Poetry Form, “Seguidilla” @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    This winter of mud… what a devastating statement… but from mud grows the finest plants I think… spring is wonderful when it comes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. I am familiar with winters of mud, Sanaa, we get them a lot, but sleeping amongst buds sounds wonderful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Grace says:

    I love that winter of mud, changing to lilacs and hint of spring, in the second septet.

    The change of thought or volta is wonderful, specially : of all the seasons. Wonderful crisp thoughts in a lovely form!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  4. Ingrid says:

    I love how you’ve kept your own distinctive poetic voice alive in the form, Sanaa: it really works well.

    ‘This winter of mud,
    who knows, what the hours will bring?
    I’ve slept amongst buds.’

    Just lovely, lovely!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. msjadeli says:

    Thank goodness “Spring pushes forth at first chance.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  6. I’ve been reading of the mudslides in the canyons in California that were affected by the forest fires. Your “winter of mud” is timely!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. We’re headed into Mud Season up here at present. Between all these back road mudbogs, the nascent but rapidly expanding pot holes (some resembling roadlakes) and waiting for Covid Needle #2, there is STRONG disincentivization to venture anywhere. I’m just going to stay home and read some outstanding poetry…like YOURS, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. RedCat says:

    “This winter of mud” really stuck with me too. I can take winters of cold, white snow and dark. Winter with just dark and mud would be soul crushing.

    The last three lines are inspired Saana. Spring really do push forth at first chance, weather or not it’s a fools spring or not.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, RedCat πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Spring feel like some kind of divine epiphany here after a winter of mud. Enjoyed this! ❀❀❀

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tricia πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Sanaa, I really, really loved the contrast between cigarettes and buds, and the word buds also conjured the word ‘butts’ to my mind, as in – cigarette butts.

    Great, great writing.

    Yours,
    David

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, David πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Tzvi Fievel says:

    “look for life’s meaning.”
    I like how the last two lines of the second stanza,
    connect back to the last line of the first stanza.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tzvi πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Helen says:

    Oh my! Your style is simply YOU … beautiful, expressive, sensuous ~ sigh.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. Imelda says:

    Lovely!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Imelda πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. So full of contrasts, but hopeful at the end.
    The winter of mud, but
    “Spring pushes forth at first chance;
    look for life’s meaning.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Georgina says:

    Oh the mud and the lilac. Wonderful contrasts and as ever so elegantly written. You show what can be done with this form.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Georgina πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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