Self Identity

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How years have passed – how time it flew
How each one brought me closer to you.
Often I envied how birds they swooped;
They feared not rain, nor wind, nor dew.
Thought I knew these faults bequeathed;
But eyes can’t quite choose what they see.
Oh! Diligence alone does clout the key.
Seems we’re staunch as though we’re same;
In perfect coherence there rose our flame.

Identity is such that when it’s lost;
Like victims fallen to untimely frost.
You’ve roused the heart – now wild and free
Have turned what once I had hoped to be.
We count not praise nor count we blame;
In perfect coherence there rose our flame.



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Form: Rondeau

Posted for Midweek Motif @ Poets United

46 Replies to “Self Identity”

  1. I understand the message of your poem to be that identity is found through connection with another person. In the end there is ‘our flame.’ So I wonder if individual identity is then lost? And it becomes dual identity?

    1. Hello Mary,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

      PS: It becomes enhanced πŸ˜‰

  2. As i read i was lulled as if entranced by the flicker of a candle flame – each word perfectly placed and flowing..and yes..we often are in relation to how others see us..

  3. “Identity is such that when it’s lost;
    Like victims fallen to untimely frost.”
    Beautifully done, Sanna! The sense of identity is created through bonding and adding it to our own self. In this way, the connections are vital… though extremely delicate. I feel, it is better to define our selves internally, with limited reference to others. my two-penn’orth… smiles

  4. My sentiments exactly, it is through our relations with one another that our purpose, reveals itself and our identity is chartered. Have a nice Wednesday; and thanks for dropping in to read mine πŸ™‚

    Much love…

  5. “Diligence alone does clout the key.” Diligent staying and not exiting? Hmmm. I remember that becoming my identity when I was married. It would be wonderful in a meeting of equals.

  6. Sanaa, your poetry just seems to improve with every poem you write. Don’t think it can get much better than this though. It’s so lovely, wise, well written. I love the tenderness of your words. What a wordsmith you are.

    1. Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚

      PS: Your kind words mean a lot to me πŸ™‚

  7. I like how you portrayed a kind of cohesion…because that’s how it is. We are individuals, making a whole with each other. And who has ever said that identity can only be singular? Well-penned. πŸ™‚

  8. This is a beautiful response to identity in terms of how you see yourself in context to another or others. A rite of passage for the young and the way it should be.

  9. Many twists and turns in this journey of life – indeed we can’t always see where we are going next. It is nice to have that flame to see by.
    It’s a lovely rondeau Sanaa like a braiding of ideas, life, discovery.

    Hugs to you

    1. Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€

      PS: Hugs to you too πŸ˜€

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