Rise, oh my soul, with your desire and longing to Eden

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Oh! a kiss plucked out from the dark seed,
impregnable and one that blooms only in tangent.

True love whose fire by far burns brightest,
is often much like finding a needle in a haystack.

Your presence curls around me, thick as smoke
encircling in deliciously dark indecision.

Stay a little longer, come and watch
dropped down, he who hid blurring his image, an illusion.

Hidden within the warm, earthy depth
my love, though false, come and blow a kiss to the flower.

 

 

Photo credits: Silence, Marta Bevacqua on BehanceΒ 

Form: Landay

Posted for Sanaa’s Challenge: My final prompt @ Real Toads

also Posted on the Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub

52 Replies to “Rise, oh my soul, with your desire and longing to Eden”

  1. I love the opening landay! It is a beautiful image, and I also like the way you moved from seed to flower throughout the poem. A very darkly passionate piece.

  2. Wonderful work indeed, Sanaa. I’m especially in awe of the final couplet. My hat is off, both in admiration of the work and in gratitude for all your contributions to The Garden. Salute!

    1. Thank you so much for your warm and kind words, Ron πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it (both the poem and the contributions to The Garden) πŸ’β€οΈ

  3. Sanaa, this form was made for you! I love the β€˜kiss plucked out from the dark seed’, the kiss blown to a flower and, especially, the lines:
    β€˜Your presence curls around me, thick as smoke
    encircling in deliciously dark indecision.’

  4. Each couplet stands on its own as a visual expression of love and passion. Thank you, Sanaa, for your painting of words: dark seed kisses, a fiery love, a presence thick as smoke. You create a world that is hard to leave.

    1. Yayyy! πŸ’β€οΈ Thank you soo much, Gillena! Sending some cake over for you, so glad you enjoyed the poem! πŸŽ‚πŸ°

      Much love..

  5. Following on from Grace & Bjorn in my reading tonight, what another powerful piece! Such passion and gentle definition on display here. Feels like your soul is on display… As a writer myself, I admire very much such a degree of openness – for me , that is what it is all about!

  6. Your presence curls around me, thick as smoke
    encircling in deliciously dark indecision.
    – These are surreal, beautiful lines.

  7. I read the landays together — as one poem — and they lattice well enough together except the last one which sort of defies the rest. Maybe as a pun, with an ironic false kiss. Elegantly structured though I’m not sure what it risks.

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