Obsession

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Thoughts frighten – rob me late at night
Propelled to draw upon a canvass.
Refuse not, let your mind foresee
To reflect would coerce – drive the soul to madness

No, don’t play with these emotions
You are like a soft gentle breeze.
Oh do tempt me with your hatred;
A smile so slow just meant to tease – what a strange unease

Too late to start – to act like saint
Her cheeks so round! Oh lips so red
Raucous burning inside the chest.
I moaned and trembled from foot to head – oh misled!

Oh every touch makes her cower;
And mere thought of me makes her cringe.
Obsession songful – hour of sport
You can miss me by a mile – miss me by an inch

 

 

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Form: FloretteΒ 

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Comments

  1. Bjorn says:

    This is so steamy… Tempted and temptation can be a dangerous game, but still it’s sweet.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  2. Victoria says:

    Subtle sensuality, well-rendered using the form.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  3. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    It is steamy with some fear mixed in too. Thank you for trying your hand at a Florette, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Grace says:

    I specially like that last stanza, what an obsession ~ I can sense a hint of fear mixed with passion ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  5. Kathy Reed says:

    Hmmm…..uneasy feelings mixed with possibilities of pleasure. And it’s true many have been driven to madness by this very thing. πŸ˜‰

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kathy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  6. WhEn LoVe bEcomes
    gAMe insTeAd
    oF ARt..
    SpORt
    rePlaces
    ArT
    iN hE
    Of HeaRt..:)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  7. Mixing passion & fear, sensuality & madness, with a subtle,almost abstract, rhyme scheme; lovely work.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Truedessa says:

    A very sensual poem filled with steam…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  9. ghostmmnc says:

    Ooo-la-la…an hour of forbidden (maybe?) fun? I need a fan! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Ghostmmnc,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  10. Marina Sofia says:

    This is the other side of the coin of the Vampire described in Mary’s poem. More enticing but just as dangerous!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Marina,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  11. That yes, no, push pull feeling!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Carol,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  12. kaykuala h says:

    The second stanza is a revelation, sends a chill!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. Bryan Ens says:

    Nicely done. I was really intrigued by the line, “Oh do tempt me with your hatred”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bryan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  14. Thotpurge says:

    Love the last line.. Sums it all up.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  15. gillena says:

    Luv the images you presented my favorite line for its reality check

    “Obsession songful – hour of sport”

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  16. Jae Rose says:

    Those last two lines finish this poem perfectly – with lots of questions – which is perfect! you have really explored the depths of obsession.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  17. Mary says:

    So very sad when one feels that one’s emotions are being played with. Any relationship in which there seems to be ‘hatred’ is one to rid oneself of, in my opinion.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  18. dsnake1 says:

    oh wow! this is so hot! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Dsnake,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  19. My reading glasses were steaming up with this sensual verse Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  20. Donna Jo says:

    Thoughts frighten – rob me late at night
    Propelled to draw upon a canvass.

    This is a powerful line … sets the stage nicely.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  21. love the tension in this poem – an ‘hour of sport’ drawn out in agony and ecstasy. Bravo too with the ‘florette’ verse structure – rose to the challenge beautifully

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Laura,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  22. You have expressed the uneasiness of the emotions in this poem…..I especially admire “”oh, misled!” You make the reader feel it – so well done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  23. Jamztoma says:

    Hi Sanaa!
    your piece here is all very alluring and telling of sensuality. all the traits of obsession and lust.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello James,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  24. Full of the passion and originality I have come to expect from you, made new yet again. (I must try a Florette!)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  25. kanzensakura says:

    Excellent rendering of the form! Softly sensual but with that slight touch of fear. Good work.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Toni,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  26. Old Egg says:

    For all the heat in this encounter there was fear too that perhaps she had let things get away from her and out of control. Let’s hope she has learned something from this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  27. Susan says:

    Scary! Sort of like an S/M scenario. I don’t like obsession. But you capture it incredibly well. (I wonder if I should use it as a Motif?)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

      PS: Sounds like a good idea πŸ™‚ we could do that.

  28. Brother Ollie says:

    This would make an excellent song. Dark and authentic.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Brother Ollie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  29. Elizabeth says:

    You have captured the enthralled sense of temptation: fear mixed with a certain longing.

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Elizabeth,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  30. Myrna says:

    This is such a sophisticated, sensual poem. So well done Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  31. L. Moon says:

    exotic and sensual – very nicely formed Sanaa

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  32. humbird says:

    Oh, it’s better to avoid…. I was struck with the line ‘Raucous burning inside the chest.’ ~ really scary sensations here…..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Humbird,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  33. Torie says:

    Very beautiful, Sanaa πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Torie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  34. gypsy snow says:

    I like this very much, Sanaa. Great ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gypsy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  35. Sumana Roy says:

    “strange unease” and “raucous burning” culminating in “Obsession songful – hour of sport”; the deep passion & fear truly “drive the soul to madness”….a lovely piece Sanaa…so happy to be participating after a long time πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana ❀️ so good to see you πŸ˜€

  36. Old Egg says:

    Although I have commented before It was good to read this poem again Sanaa. I bow down to passion’s wisdom and let it have its way!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  37. Your piece is skillfully penned. The weaving together of passion, lust and fear does send chills down the spine. And this line, “Oh do tempt me with your hatred” highlights this obsession. Well done!✨??✨

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  38. Jae Rose says:

    That last line is very powerful and speaks of much strength

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae ❀️ good to see you πŸ™‚

  39. I love the last stanza, particularly the last line… which seems to take the entire poem–and all its emotions–and pack them into an inch. Oh, the pressure…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  40. gillena says:

    Sanaa
    The greyscale photo is stunning; it resonates all the shadowy spaces in your poem.

    Thanks for another intriguing prompt this week

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  41. Ellecee says:

    You have described perfectly the tension, fear, excitement and lust,,,heading into perhaps a disastrous event, but,,,,perhaps not,, I love the form, not familiar with it, a beautiful flow,,,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

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