Near the end of a long and winding road

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Though dismal dawning sky rebukes longing yet here I am, 
in quiet fury hung discouragement loathing the way I am. 

I believe darkness can dissipate with the flowering of light,
it’s impossible to go on between crossroads yet here I am.

We loved similar to the way one learns to become unafraid,
I wonder whether heartache understands the way I am. 

Mournful winter how much longer until end of bloodbath?
surely world must know answer judging by how silent I am.

I stand hoping tears may convert into fulfillment of desires,
when sky comes falling you will know just how devout I am.

 

Photo credits: Giphy

Form: Ghazal 

Process notes: Magaly invites us to craft poetry that wastes no words. I chose
to write combining two concepts together:

“I tell you this to break your heart, by which I mean only that it break open and never close again to the rest of the world.” ― Mary Oliver.

A stunning ghazal “Kab raat basar hogi,” by Faiz Ahmed Faiz where he longs for
love, peace and revolution. 

Posted for Weekend Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

 

and Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United 

62 thoughts on “Near the end of a long and winding road

      • Magaly Guerrero says:

        I thought the “English” in the link that leads us to “Kab raat basar hogi”, but no luck. No matter. I am back to say that I really like that middle stanza, all those raw emotions… which leave a reader wanting to hug the speaker really, really, really tight.

  1. Sherry Blue Sky says:

    “We loved similar to the way one learns to become unafraid”….what a cool line – and perceptive awareness – that is. And through it all, “here I am.” Learning and growing, and writing your journey. Cool.

  2. Kim M. Russell says:

    You did a great job of combining two concepts together into a ghazal, Sanaa, and I like the Mary Oliver quotation. Your title reminded me of the Beatles song, ‘The long and winding road’: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fR4HjTH_fTM
    I particularly like the lines:
    ‘I believe darkness can dissipate with the flowering of light,
    it’s impossible to go on between crossroads yet here I am’
    and
    ‘I stand hoping tears may convert into fulfilment of desires,
    when sky comes falling you will know just how devout I am.’

  3. Mary says:

    I love the idea of darkness dissipating with the flowering of light. and the idea of tears converting into the fulfillment of desires. I also enjoyed the picture you chose as well!

  4. Chrissa says:

    A poem that rewards both several readings, for rhythm and the way you balance the ideas (dark/light and the crossroads, sadness and fury and therefore stillness and motion) and for the way the text brings you back to the image of a burning candle balanced between one already out and one not yet lit. Lovely.

  5. gillena says:

    The yet brings so much reality into your poem. Yes we can have the faith and the hope and the trust. Yet the desolation and the longing sneaks up on us.
    Hugs
    Thanks for droppibg by my sumie Sunday today

    Much💖💖💖love

  6. rob kistner says:

    I enjoyed reading this again Sanaa. The third couplet really struck me on this 2nd read. Falling in love is losing the fear, especially to give oneself wholly in love. Beautiful! I posted about the Ancients.

  7. Vivian Zems says:

    I love this, Sanaa. There’s nothing like a Ghazal to repeat affirmations. I’m sure I commented on this earlier- but I’m not sure. I love that it’s simple- yet so revealing- I.e. .”…..I am”

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