At the touch of you,
the sun rose red
and poured
into my blood;
as the world around me
spins and rouses me
from oblivion.
Perhaps
the muted voice of subconscious
smiled,
hushed once by the court
of fear.
You are ardor
that beckons me
to ride the tumultuous waves.
I wander alone
knowing anguish followed
and listened to the sound
of footsteps in the dead of night.
Its eyes glide
upon my fiery form
longing to stroke my limbs,
to torture me
and fill my senses with heady scent.
Then break me,
come pierce my soul
and stab my heart
sweep me up into the dark
and find I am governed by
the moon and stars.
Come, tell me
if you can put out the light.
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#notebookpoetry, #passion, #handwriting, #inktober2018
Posted for ‘Kerry’s Challenge’ @ Real Toads
Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
This is so filled with passion… love to see your handwritten version… Just wish I could do that.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
You write so well! Mine would just be gibberish my handwriting is so bad. I like the passion in this.
Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Two excellent poems, Sanaa, both with equal measures of passion in meaning.
The second piece is especially powerful, on the ‘breakable’ theme. The final stanza carried me away.
Thank you for giving us a glimpse of you handwriting – it adds depth to the words, so personal.
Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Kerry 😍 so glad you liked it! ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt)
Two handwritten poems, Sanaa, well done! My hand was tired after writing one ! Both poems are beautiful but my favourite is the first. I especially:
‘At the touch of you,
the sun rose red
and poured
into my blood’
and
‘You are ardor
that beckons me
to ride the tumultuous waves’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Oh, wow! Such passion and force in both of them. The sweet romanticism of the first is endearing. And I loved the way you encountered anguish in the second one — your buildup with the description of it following you through the night is familiar and stressful and then the final stanza restores a certain power with that challenge. Loved this bit: “come pierce my soul/and stab my heart/sweep me up into the dark/and find I am governed by /the moon and stars.”
Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Anmol 😀 so glad you liked it! ❤️
I love your beautiful poems, as always, for the exquisite use of language … and I am awed by the neatness and beauty of your handwriting!
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😍 so good to see you ❤️
Really beautiful, Sanaa… it feels like seeing you on the screen. I love the wood planks holding your notebook. The photos really add something textile here, lovely.
Awwww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you liked it! ❤️
I note the voice of the subconscious, hushed by fear. I have hushed that voice at my peril, in my day. Smiles. I especially love your opening lines, the sun rising red………
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so good to see you ❤️
In the first i luv the heat seeping into you like a warming sun. A good sip of wine can do wonders
Happy you dropped by my sumie Sunday today
Much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
The second one gave me shivers–what a great reversal. 🙂 Also, really enjoyed the image of the red sun pouring down.
Thank you so much, Chrissa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Love your poems, I could read them again and again and again.
Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Vicki 😀 so glad you liked it! ❤️
Passionate and beautifully Sanaa! I love the photography of your written word!
Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so good to see you ❤️
The poems are hard in their way, sad, sorrowful…perhaps it is the season? Still beautiful.
Thanks for your comments on my poem.
Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Just beautiful, Sanaa! I loved seeing your handwriting too.
“You are ardor
that beckons me
to ride the tumultuous waves”
really is stunning phraseology, Sanaa.
Your poetry keeps getting better and better!
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
These are beautiful, sensuous. I like the photos of your journal entries. Very nice.
Thank you so much, Myrna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Sizzling. I like the sun rose red and pours…rouses, ardor and come tell me if you can put out the light.
Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Beautiful as always!
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Beautifully rendered pieces, as always. And I very much enjoyed the handwritten images.
Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Filled with passion, and a lovely legible handwriting.
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I loved each stanza but you saved the very best for the last (in my humble opinion.)
Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so good to see you ❤️
This is beautiful Sanaa, my favorite stanza is the last. It is packed with emotion that the reader can feel.
Thank you so much, Truedessa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
How I love those first four lines! The movement, the colors, the shapes the words make out of my lips and in my head… All that red and lively.
Awww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Magaly 😍 so glad you liked it! ❤️
Lovely to see poems written in notebooks.. find it impossible to do!!
Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Beautifully penned!
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it’s so great to see a poem in the poet’s handwriting. 🙂
loved the two poems, both equally full of passion. i can see why poetry can energize you. 🙂
Thank you so much, Lee San 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Handwritten and a good writing form is a real blessing to maintain. Not many would find it easy to go back to such ways.
Hank
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤️